DEPTHS...
Water flows from the showerhead,
Warm water caressing every cell of your skin…
I step in behind you,
You hardly notice there is a change behind you…
As my fingers mingle with the water’s caress,
You realize it is I…
I slip the soap from your hands,
As you enjoy its slipperiness…
I gently explore your skin,
Leaving soapy trails over all of you…
I reach for the shampoo,
Lathering your hair,
Your sighs mix
With the sounds of the water…
I turn you out of the stream
As I caress your skin made so slick,
Fingertips exploring the very depths
Of your soul…
The intimate parts of your body,
Swell in anticipation
Of the touch of my fingertips,
Waiting, wanting…
I slip closer behind you
My body forming itself to yours,
As my fingertips begin to explore
The moist depths, moistened not
By the waters flowing over you
But, by you…
Your moans replace your sighs,
As you melt into my arms,
Your eyes close, imagining
All happening to you…
You feel my body
Melt into yours,
As yours melts into mine…
You feel that familiar hardness,
Between your legs…
You bend over, as it slips inside,
Our moans of pleasure mixing
With the sounds of the water,
Melting our passion to each other…
You turn, putting your arms around me,
And your legs, climbing up to my waist
We turn, letting the water
Caress our skin, warming our souls…
Our ecstasy builds
As our moments come together,
Our moans now become louder,
As our explosions mount…
Our kisses become more and more passionate
Our eyes close, yet seeing
Our love for each other,
As it grows…
© Jonathan Wikkins April 26, 2003
Revised February 29, 2008
All Rights Reserved
(the response)
HEIGHTS
I stepped under the warm shower,
sighing as it began to trickle over my body.
I turned my head slightly to the side
and felt the spray of water pellet my neck,
knowing it would soothe my tired muscles.
I sensed your presence,
and this awareness flowed through my soul;
I felt your gentle fingers mingle with the water
as they traced rivulets down my back.
You reached around me, took the soap from my hands,
and gently began sliding your slippery fingers over my body.
You reached for the shampoo and lathered my hair,
and then used the soapy bubbles
to rub the weariness from my neck.
You worked your way toward my breasts
and I felt your hands cup around them,
squeeze them gently, then turn me around to face you.
I reveled in the feel of my breasts
being tickled by the hair on your chest
as I snuggled into your arms.
I reached for the soap, lathered my hands,
and began a bubbly adventure of entwining my fingers
through your chest hair.
Then I slid them down ...down …down,
…to cradle the familiar hardness.
You turned me around again,
and drew my back up against your body.
You caressed me, touched me and slipped inside me.
All the while, the sounds of the water
provided background music for our sighs of ecstasy,
and the streams washed over us
as a cleansing ritual for a rebirth of our vows…
a rebirth of our oneness, our unity, our love.
I suddenly realized I was no longer tired,
and I knew...
we had climbed to a new depth of intimacy.
m
Author notes
This is a sorta collaboration with WaryDreamer
Written April 26th, 2003
if this piece happens to win any points, i'll split them with my colaborator, WaryDreamer...
sexy enough?
In a list
A contest entry
- Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Kinky is the Game by HaileeDear.
300 points, ended March 2, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - shower scene by darknessreigns.
800 points, ended April 17, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Partner ^ Collaborations Only (( Adults Only I Don't Baby Sit )) by theredcatjazzoflove.
1100 points, ended April 15, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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hhmmmmmmmm very sensual and very well deserving of your trophies bravo
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I reach for the shampoo,
Lathering your hair,
Your sighs mix
With the sounds of the water…
love both these
You bend over, as it slips inside,
Our moans of pleasure mixing
With the sounds of the water,
Melting our passion to each other…
All the while, the sounds of the water
provided background music for our sighs of ecstasy,
and the streams washed over us
as a cleansing ritual for a rebirth of our vows…
a rebirth of our oneness, our unity, our love.
i fucken love it! this is my type of lyrics yes o lawd yes! yes gosh yes this is my type of passion yes thanks for this yes i loved it
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lovely
what can I say? oh wait!I know, if it doesn't win a trophy, diffenent honorable mention. -
wow. this was amazing. i loved how you showed both sides of the story. it takes a wonderful writer to do such a thing. the words you used flowed so well together i could almost hear a voice to go along with the imagery. there are no words to describe how wonderful this is. bravo
xoxo
pixie -
I like this. I like shower scenes as far as erotica is concerned, I don't know why... easier entrance?
, I'm unsure but they become very hot. I like the way that with was in most parts, delicately put, which made it less vulgar and more 'give it to me'.
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And I wont tell you that showering with a man is one of the most intimate erotic moments in a womans life. LOL...Nope.. cause you already seem to know that!
Sigh..won't tell you either how much I miss that.. NOpe..wont tell you that either.
Wonderful write.. I loved it all! Great collaberation..
Hugs..
Mary Ann -
need a shower so much more now. haha
Frig...this is too hot for me first thing in the morning!!!!
Breathe rhiannon, breathe! It's given me a whole new desire for a long overdue shower for two! I so need soaping up and my hair washed now....shit..why did i ever read you guys...lol All that mellllllllllllting....and mooooooooaaaaaaaaaaaaaaning....and sooaaaaaaaaaaaaap and.........sigh! -
sensual
VERY SENSUAL..im in awe ..
the words just flowed with ease..
excellent work...beautiful -
like a basket ofprecious gems
Awesome,beautiful,sensual,loving,well-written,magical,enchanting,picturepainted on the canvas for your reader. Clapping out LOUD!!! This is as it should be with ones soulmate. Some never find that person. I think, all beings seek their soulmate. The pictures are beautiful toppings on the dessert presented here. Done with such taste and class. Thanks 4 the mental journey today! This is going on my favorites so I can read it again when I want. Sorry, it takes so long to make a round with my favorite writers. I try to keep going on the list. Write a couple pcs. here and there myself. Excuse typos the weather is affecting the disabilities,again! God Bless You great joint effort. -
Oh, you both did this so well, I like the two veiws and then the final joinging..
Nice work you two, sexy!
Bestest, ~ Ce
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You captured all the emotions in this one
Beautiful sensual and erotic my friend
I loved it
I just posted a new one
Drop in and see me too
Blessings
Susan~~~~~
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Can someone please turn down the thermostat in here?
I enjoyed this to the max
( no not climax ) Lol, sorry I sometimes let my sense of humor come forth..
A very good read I do say!
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my oh my,yes,very steamy,very well written,and yes the bending over piece could be phrased differently,but i loved it
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Sighs ...oh, so erotic..steamy...sensual...dreamy.
The flow between the two writes is incredible, elegant..
meld perfectly into such a lovely picture of passion. -
Ohhh Myy ohh Myyyyy me needs to take a cold shower now instead of a hots shower LOL, that was defitestly a steamiestty wowza write LOL,
wow, Cold joe, you need a "COLD" shower
LOL
excellent erotic and very all the way there, really Really enjoyed,
Sincerely,
joe -
Very soft sensual piece. Really enjoyed the scene from two different view points. You might want to play with this and try to melt them together instead of having them run seperately.
I have to agree with one of the comments that the "bending over" part did take some of the sweetness of the piece away. (No suggestions on how to replace it though)
Overall a most (and moist) enjoyable read!!! -
The two points of view was my favorite feature of the poem. It makes the piece really appealing to a wider audience since there is something there for both sexes. A beautiful erotic picture painted. good job.
-Develon -
whoah um...whew...think i need a shower now...i certainly enjoyed reading this piece, brought back a few memories...must be repeated...
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sexy
yeah well i guess you could call this good, clean sex...
nicely done, having the two points of view presented...
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wow, this is a beautiful, sensual write here. very well done, i think i need a cold shower now myself hehehe. very tastefully and exquisitely done. excellent work. blessed be
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Have to say it was a warming piece! LOL! Very neat that you two both wrote something with the same take, different perspectives! Good job!
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Whew where's the shower I may need a cold one after this collab (no pun LOL) That was hot stuff
I love the two points of view with this collab which is so unique and I love that both of this works wove so well together...The intimacy braided with the sex was wonderful as well ( I loved the hair washing part too by the way that is sooo great )
Exceelent job to the both of you
~~Dawn
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What an absolutely beautiful, sensual and loving write.
you have done a wonderful job of penning a most beautiful experience, i loved it.
well done to both of you.
Ann
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it was a well penned experience
the last line is the kicker....
we met in a new level of intimacy
in the renewal of our vows and unity of oneness!
this is beautiful
and thank you both for your compassionate love
shared on the screen
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Groovy
This was sensual and the most amazing shower scene I've seen in a while. The only part I disliked is in the mans version where he says "You bend over, and I slip inside" or something like that. It looses something for me personally because I think the "bending over" part is in a way degrading. That's just my little pet peeve. The poem was over all amazing and I thank you for sending me the link. claps applause for the both of you... take a bow you deserve it
Light and Laughter, and groovy shower sex
Kali -
gemini...I thank you for your pause in your morning... and Doug...No need to feel as if you are a peeping-tom...This is a beautiful experience..nothing dirty about it whatsoever...It reflects a display of love....
and thank You Heddycha...your comments are appreciated too.
m -
ooh. showers with two are always so fun. I *love* getting my hair washed by my male. mrow! ^.~
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its so fresh so fresh and so clean clean
well i feel like a peeping-tom... i feel so dirty... shower is needed now... is there room? well forget what i just said... you guys should keep the bathroom window closed...
Doug -
Sensual, erotic, sexy, loving and oh so gorgeous. I loved this - you have both done a wonderful job here - what a delightful interlude in my morning.
Love it!
~Von~ -
ok its time to take a shower, This is just Awesome I love it . thank honey now just instead of fantastic let's try it HAHAHa hey I can say that I am his wife. GREAT WRITE love it
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yummmmmmmm
sensual and loving
yet erotic and fun
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