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I Am Enlightenment

Pieces of me...
  Drift through the air sweeping down on water to quench...
                                      a dehydrated mind.

I              AM                THE               DESERT!

I am that sandstorm that causes that manic pressure from NOT KNOWING WHAT WE ALL SHOULD KNOW.

I am the one that whispers
  truth into
         your third eye.

Because I know

I am your deja-vu
because I have been there

infinite

I am enlightened and ignorant...

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Written October 2nd, 2006

A contest entry

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  • NoWayJo
    October 3, 2006
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    You really wrote some great contrasts in the way of images in this poem, Charna...I especially liked the twist on the deja-vu line and the title "Enlightenment" really does pull it all together.

    You don't post a new poem often, but when you do it's to sense your writing getting better-and-better each time!

    Jo


  • kyuuketsuki ai
    October 3, 2006
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    The form you wrote this poem in is awesome! I also really like your subject. It is very beautiful!Good luck in my contest!


  • tawk gold member
    October 3, 2006
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    I liked your format too. I could feel your anger. Wow what an awesome poem. Theresa


  • kyo
    October 2, 2006
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    i like this your format in this write is something i havent seen very much and i think you used it awsomely as for the content of the poem i also really liked it although i dont get the sandstorm analogy do you rage alot? any way i think this was really good and i wish you luck in the contest


  • RealEyezRealize
    October 2, 2006
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    FREAKIN AWESOME

    woah that was freakin saweet i wish i could write like you, you are truly an inspiration, and i thank you for that i love you okbye.....WRITE ON ROCK ON READ ON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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