I wore my veil of transparent ice blue
Embroidered anger through and through.
A shield engraved with red ruby tears
I wore that mask for so many cold years.
And through my hate your pain was born
A shattered bond lays frayed and torn.
Heart strings pull with a miserable chime
The dear song of friendship left behind.
But if I could give a small present to you
I'd give my veil of transparent ice blue.
I no longer need it, my heart has repaired
For now I know, I lost the one who cared.
So when you're lost in the night's quiet still
With a moment to ponder and time to kill.
Remember me with fond thoughts of the past
For you know deep inside, no malice I cast.
Bonds can be mended if we're honest and true
But I've always known that, and so have you.
So please take this dove of peace that I give
And put the past behind us.lets try to forgive.
Author notes
Written October 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Cold Regret by DesolatELifE.
689 points, ended December 15, 2007, 29 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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heh, no, you're right, you're not who I guessed, so I'll actually tell you that I thought this poem was absolutely frikin amazing =D
It was sooo hard deciding between this and the poem I gave gold!
*emphasis on WOW!!!!*
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Though I don't know who wrote this due to the anonymity of the contest, I recognise it.. and I think I know who wrote it. Won't suggest my idea, 'cause then if I'm wrong I sound stupid. heh. but yeah.
I'm going to assume this is you (well obviously it is You, but I'm assuming it's the you I think it is), and tell you that this is as good as I would ahve expected, so just remind yourself of how I enjoy your work!
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Thank you so much for the silver trophy and I'm pleased you enjoyed my work. But...I don't think I'm who you think I am
Princess Perdue 
Shaz xx
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Great! I loved the descriptive words and how you offer the apologies and peace at the very end. I liked this a lot -
Hey, that was great a very beautiful and well worded poem, its pretty close to what i was looking for, good luck
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Thank you for your lovely comments, and for taking the time to read my work.
Shaz xx
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Apologetically remorseful and enveloped in the new strength of a realized self truth. When emotional armor has been stripped of it's very necessity the overwhelming nakedness of of the soul can bring new sight. I love the words you have chosen to put together side by side...each one purposeful in its task of elevating the emotional impact of the piece as a whole.
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i love it the words you used were perfect also i really liked the contrast between blue and red in the first stanza(and if there wasn't one well heck mabey im crazy) wonderful though i loved it -
I think this is just exquisite! Thank you for sharing
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wow.
i love this so much. its really descriptive and amazing.
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Oh, I love the feel of this poem. It's very bittersweet, yet leaves with a promise, a grieving hope for rekindling the relationship. It is sad in parts, beautifully nostalgic in others. The imagery is brilliant, and gives the entire poem an elegant mood. Wonderful write.
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Thanks for sharing this piece about forgiveness.a lovely piece with wonderful imagary well done
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Im not sure of the meaning behind this,
but it is a beautiful way of making peace
perfect wording well meant and a perfect read,
thanks for sharing
warm thoughts
Frozentearz
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