Where were you that night when you made me cry on the phone?
You offered silent unspoken promises of what the future might hold,
If I were only to be brave enough to reach out, and grasp it.
Your mind wasn't there because you snatched it away
Stole the stars away from my midnight eyes
They still sparkled bright the next morning
Though you could hardly call that sun in my eyes
You held me so tightly that night
As if you were afraid to let me go
That I might melt away with the stars that morning
Just the way our love did
Exactly the way our love did
It's hard to explain, but a part of you was missing
The depth in your darkened eyes were gone
I couldn't feel the love in your breathless whispers
Your soulless goodbyes, our last kiss
I had given myself to you completely
Utterly exposed, vulnerable
I wasn't good enough, you ran
I was alone, crying, lonely
I can only ask myself where you had gone,
and who this monster you left behind truly is
He isn't the one who whispered I love you
He isn't the one who was afraid to let go,
Unafraid to speak the truth in the darkest
but surely most honest hours of the night
The you I once knew was gone
Some days, I find him again
Hiding in your careless manner,
Your contagious laughter
Your mischievous grin
But I know better
Those are just reflections
Echos of the song that was once there
I strain to hear the melody,
but it's gone, gone, gone...
Please, tell me you can hear it too.
Author notes
No names, this is about someone from the past... I can't help but wonder where the boy I fell in love with went... He sure as hell isn't here now.
(As of now, I'm happily with someone else, but this is recapturing emotions I buried three years ago... sometimes they're ghost feelings, coming back to remind me of what once was... *I'll bury them deeper than before*)
Written April 25th, 2003
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- Make Me Feel by LostInThought.
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Thank you... good lord, -laughs- you've dug up half my emotional history now... -wonders if I should be amused or afraid- Oh well... glad you liked it... I was more creative back then... the part of me that was lonely and lost isn't anymore, so there's not as much inside screaming to be left out... still... I wish I could write again. -
excellent
You held me so tightly that night
"As if you were afraid to let me go
That I might melt away with the stars that morning
Just the way our love did
Exactly the way our love did " ....what a lovely verse! especially the line: That I might melt away with the stars that morning" Beautiful! I was also captured by this line and think your title was an excellent choice for the poem:
"Those are just reflections
Echos of the song that was once there"
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Truthfully, it's not about his lack of prescense then or today... he lacked the emotionally capacity to even semi-decently feign the feelings that I needed to see to keep a serious relationship alive... But he did make me think about my own morals and beliefs, and views on suicide, so I do have that to thank him for.
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Kick him in the shin. If he doesn't show up, you'll still feel better.
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You are an incredible writer.
You capture your own emotions so
well..This is a very sad peice, but
I'm glad that you are happily
with someone else now. I can relate
quite a bit to this poem.
Thanks for sharing, Stay strong,
Write on!
twizted bizkit -
After reading this I feel like shit...
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