I remember a time
In days gone by,
When I was alone.
I dreamt of finding my soul mate,
My perfect match.
But time and time again,
My heart was broken
And battered
And shattered into a million pieces.
Each time I would gather up the splinters
And try to put them carefully back together,
And move on.
And then I met you,
While my heart was still shredded.
You helped me to tie it back together,
Helped it grow stronger.
And for this my love will never stray from you.
I am eternally yours.
Author notes
To Rob, for our anniversary
category number 3 "I miss you my love."
Written September 30th, 2006
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How inspiritational!!! This is great! You even give me hope! Thanks for entering my 2nd chance contest! What a terrific write! Thanks!
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this is actually a thoughtfull lovely poem! i really like how the plot of this poem went and to think this plot came true! your heart was breaking and while you were fixing it he came along to help you...awwww!! really sweet
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Eh. I'm with Pariah. It just seemed like a note some high school girl would give to her boyfriend, and in exactly that tone. It didn't even seem poetic, to be honest. You could take out the spacing and it'd just be a note. Spice it up and make it as unique as your relationship.
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This is a sweet dedication; I hate being honest on poems that are dedicated to others. But the structure was nice and spaced. The emotion was definitely intact. I felt the metaphors and imagery was a little cliche but whatever.
I'll let Liberation of Sense give you her thoughts.
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hey this is pretty
lol
very cute ^.^
thanks for entering -
Aww
Wonderful...really this is a great piece...it's so emotional...and I can say I have been through this...wonderful write! I loved this piece...and I am happy to say you are moving on to the finals!
you'll hear more later!
Lee-Ann
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