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Classified Truth



Honor slain in Renaissance times,

        dimming the heart's beams of love



Fluorescent lights offer false

       promises of happiness abound



Files of lies stacked high,

   while truth remains hidden

        in a folder stamped classified



Bogus license gives liberty

      to speak evil with a forked tongue



Lunar illuminations birth the reality

           of maniacal genius inflating self ego



 





Author notes

Well I figured I would try this word bank as word banks are usually a challenge for me. I started this aiming for a love poem but it just wasn't happening....lol The word evil kind of gave me trouble making this a love poem so I took ut in another direction. Not bad for something that is not something of my norm......hope you like it  

word bank:

genius
license
classified
Renaissance
evil
liberty
fluorescent
lunar
beams
Written October 2nd, 2006

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  • artis
    November 19, 2006
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    great form and style....

    this was indeed superb, and holds many interpertations for those who read.....and yes it is a hard task both the writing, and the living of such words....artis


  • Entwining Beauty
    October 14, 2006
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    what can i say everyone else has beat me to it, you have a wonderful gift for creating an image with words your poem was truly divine and i loved word for word.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    A well crafted write. Very good flow and tone. Masterful word usage. Thought provoking. Nice metaphor and alliteration. Very good expression of emotion. A much enjoyed read. Shelley
    Edited on Oct 10, 6:38 because ''.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    October 9, 2006
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    Well Versed!

    A very well done pieced together poem using the word bank my dear friend, I applaud you, and thought you did an excellent job. But ofcourse that's the way you do, you're great!!!

    Much love, Timothy


  • starwing
    October 5, 2006
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    it's always good to try something new bel, and you did a fine job...peace and harmony...desi

  • nightlover
    October 3, 2006
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    Very nice. many things going on in this piece. I loved thwe false promises, stamped classified. Yes, that seems to solve a many things. Thanks for sharing. Jules.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 2, 2006
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    Nice job as always, my dear lady. You write with such elegance. Wonderful job, with a very different word bank.
    Best to you in the contest!


  • B Chandler
    October 2, 2006
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    this is truly deep...keep penning


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    October 2, 2006
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    Sis, you have done an outstanding job with this. I have seen what you can do with word banks and you amaze me everytime you work with one. Good luck in the contest.


    lil Bro


  • MuddyKing
    October 2, 2006
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    wonderful


  • ashleyheartsyou
    October 2, 2006
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    wow amazing job what with the word bank of random words. great poem


  • Desire gold member
    October 2, 2006
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    Loved It!!

    Holy Guacamole!!
    Well I will say this~ Anyone can throw words at You and
    You can dish them on a platter to feed the masses
    (does an Emeril-BAM!!)
    Fine job You did with the Word Bank...Cashed in on it!!

    What a way to season this Love verse~
    (I must be hungry or something)

    Beautiful Masterpiece You have penned and though sad..
    You deliver this with emotion that takes the reader
    into another dimension...which is a Gift in itself!

    Thank You for sharing this my Friend!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings always!
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 2, 2006
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    You are so consistently, impressively talented. Great writing and use of the word bank. Keep your words flowing. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Jeannie


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 2, 2006
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    My sister, this is AWESOME! Way to go, girl! I wish you all the best in the contest!
    Loven ya,
    Sandy


  • Celticmoon
    October 2, 2006
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    Thanks Kari I appreciate your words. Wasn't sure about this piece since it so different from my norm

  • Kari gold member
    October 2, 2006
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    deep

    This was wonderful! You are so so very good at word banks.You have used your talent very well here I love the picture with it. Sometimes it is good to do out of our norm..I think you can do almost anything and excell in it!

    Kari

  • PalmettoSky
    October 2, 2006
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    well done. I don't do very well on these kind of poems either. I think it shows your talent when you are able to wrap your head around a few select random words then put them together in a a way that makes sense to others! thanks for sharing.Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. I am glad I read it.

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