I dream of seeing of seeing blood,
Running from my wrist.
But i won't do it like that poem,
That says i'll do it with a twist.
I'll do it nice and simple,
With a simple straight cut.
I'll do it nice and deep,
So the flow will never shut.
I'll sit there and watch,
The blood flow free.
Then i will slowly lay down,
And cease to be.
And finally they'll be happy,
To know that they have won.
And I'll begin a new life,
Where my pain is done.
Author notes
this is a piece that i wrote when i was suicidal and very depressed,I LOVE MYSELF NO MATTER WHAT
Written October 2nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Depressed.... by XxSiNnErxX.
300 points, ended November 9, 2006, 6 entries
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Wow...this is a really good poem. I loved the rhyming scheme you have set up. All around a very good poem. I am glad that you are feeling better about yourself. Keep writing it always helps! Thank you so much for your entry and good luck!
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Good Job
This is simple, honest and original. Because som any people want toinclude such gory dramatic details, i enjoy a simpler piece....I mean not the the topic is a good thing, but you know what I mean. Great write!!! And Thanks for Sharing~~Keep penning~~
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kinda makes me wanna go kill myself. you put it quite elegantly... so totally vivid. depressing.
actually - it doesnt make me want to kill myself. i lie. it makes me want to live... just to spite those that would be happy because they've won...
it seems the speaker took the cowardly lion way out...
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Hello thank you for entering!! You just entered this so I will wait to see if you follow all my rules. Anyway I liked this because i think all of us go through these moments. Not that all of us have suicidal moments but we all feel depressed sometimes. Thanks and gooooooooood luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Nice job I like the rhyme scheme... good luck
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