Nobody understands how I feel,
None have been in my shoes,
Yet all judge,
Me.
Nobody's been where I've been,
Nobody's seen what I've seen,
Yet all judge,
Me.
Been to the abyss and back,
On my knees,
Walked it with one other person,
Though I've lost him now.
Lost my family,
Lost my friends,
Will I ever see the light again?
The light at the end of the tunnel,
It seems so far,
I can't seem to reach it,
Yet I've walked so far...
My minds monsters,
Jumping out at every corner,
Causing me pain,
Slowly torturing,
Me.
I feel I must go now,
I won't last any longer,
Make my final effort,
Goodbye.
Author notes
Written October 1st, 2006
A contest entry
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A little depressing and angsty. I feel this write could have been a little less emotional with more poetic changes. It was however, touching.
Much luck
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Hi. Thanks for your wonderful entry into my contest and your patience for waiting on me to judge. Sorry about the long wait. I like the slight repetition in this. Thanks for the entry.
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Well, I was looking for hopeful and inspiring. I also asked for no suicide poems, and while this does not bluntly state that the ending strongly implies it. At least to me. And if it makes ME think 'suicide' then it WILL make her think it. I'm sorry I have to remove this poem.
Anyway, it was a lovely poem. Very dark. A good write.
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This is a wonderful write. Thank you so much for entering and good luck!
Love always,
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a good poetic piece here which you have penned, very enjoyable, the flow is really good. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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touching
very good work,but dont worry about those who judge, because although not the same pair, i believe we all one day have to wear shoes just like those you write about.it makes people imagine the pain you feel when you have wrote it and wonder do any of us understand
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Such a sad poem - we feel hou you must feel as this is written - down and out and thinking life is not worth living. There are those who judge and who have not travelled in your shoes; there are those that make rude remarks and those that pity you. Sentiments well expressed in these lines - good entry for the option chosen.
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