The devil danced at midnight
beneath a waning moon
with his minions before him,
twas a sight to make one swoon.
He pranced in jubilation,
then capered with a shout,
his arms flailed like a windmill
as his legions danced about.
He cursed the God of heaven
the demon horde gave tongue,
he vowed to steal each mortal soul,
every single one.
But first a plan was needed
to carry out the deed,
some way to blind humanity
so no danger was perceived.
"Our appearance must be winsome,
our ways seem as a lark,
we mustn't ever let them know
our agenda is so dark."
"Let's make for them a holiday,
the best they've ever seen,
we'll give it to their children
and we'll call it Halloween."
"They'll dress as little goblins,
as pirates and as ghouls,
they'll have parties in their churches
and one at every school."
"They'll beg adults for candy
while they roam from street to street,
dressed as little monsters
as they scream out trick or treat."
"How can there be real devils
if it's just a game they play,
no one will believe in us
that's how we'll win the day."
"We'll confuse these hapless mortals,
in God they'll have their doubts,
they'll all be dead and buried
ere they know what we're about."
"And if they die in mortal sin
well then my friends we've won,
they'll spend eternity with us
each and every one."
Author notes
Written October 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- Wanted horror stories by Darc Soul.
300 points, ended October 16, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - This is Halloween! by thorlorn thanatos.
400 points, ended November 23, 2008, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for reading and commenting on the poem, Amunet. Your words are appreciated.
Grizzled -
I'm not a huge fan of rhyme. Probably because I don't write it too well myself
But you're piece flows very well and I enjoyed reading it most definitely. It is a great tale for halloween. Bravo!
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Thanks for reading and for the comments, Jul3s.
Grizzled -
Loved the rhythm and ryme !!
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Thanks for reading and for your comments. They are appreciated.
Grizzled -
Great idea, well said, but could do with a few rhythmic tweaks here and there. It does seem like a sing-song sort of piece, so would (in my eyes) benefit from having a solid beat throughout. It was good fun to read though
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Thank you, Batteredangel. I apprciate the time you took to read and comment on the poem. Glad you liked it.
Grizzled -
I appreciate your comments Darc Storm and I like the theme of your contest. Thanks.
Grizzled -
This is a very well written piece. You did such a grat job with the rhyming and the meter is smooth and the story itself is quite enjoyable.
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Thanks for reading and commenting on the poem, it is appreciated.
Grizzled -
This was really good. I found it somewhat humorous though. But perhaps that's just me? I liked the fact that you talked about Halloween and how the Devil came up with the idea. Yay! Free candy is great. Sugar highs are fun. Stay up all night and play video games. Great write!
Vermillion -
Nice to hear from you Cathy, I'd been wondering how you were since I hadn't seen you at the Soup lately. Thanks for reading
Grizzled -
Thrilling read
I'm thrilled to be the first to comment on this my friend! Its a wonderfully written poem!!! I can't imagine anyone offering any suggestion that would improve it either! I loved it, Cathy
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