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A Dusty Old Rose

Just a Dusty Old Rose


Hidden from time
on a shelf out of sight
In a dark little corner
not captured by light

A Rose - a Dusty Old Rose

A momento of mine
of a beautiful past
a Memory so vivid
a memory life cast

A Rose - a Dusty Old Rose

I remember the moment
I remember the place
I remember the look
As we stood face to face

A Rose - A Dusty Old Rose

She gave me a flower
from her heart - I suppose
Still treasured and lovely
That Dusty Old Rose

Mr. Doug

A contest entry

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  • Geovanna
    December 26, 2007
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    This is very romantic and wistful, I really love it, Thanks for the good work!

  • bumbed housewife
    October 29, 2006
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    Another good poem, I'm going to have to read yours more often.


  • windhover3 gold member
    October 10, 2006
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    This is lovely, the refrain creates a cadence which echoes the romance, but also reinforces the sadness conveyed by the dust and past tense of the poem. This is a different take than I had envisioned for the contest. That doesn't invalidate it, but the transition is between the authors remembrance of the time and place and expressions versus conveying them to the reader.

    The meter is very well handled, and the rhyme creates a lyric movement to give us a beautiful song. The sense of love and sadness both win through.


  • Angels Delight
    October 2, 2006
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    Mr Doug...

    Sonja sent us this link and I now know why she thought it should be shared with us...It was simply amazing and beautiful...

    Thank you for creating such a wonderful piece of poetry...

    Much Love
    Tessa


  • KevinDunn
    October 1, 2006
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    Another very attractve poem.


  • Mr Doug
    September 30, 2006
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    Again - Thanks for your positive comments - - you truly help to make my day - -

    Mr. Doug


  • Sonja
    September 30, 2006
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    Another great poem on your site. Now I see that I must visit it very often. What a nice memories from only one dusty rose....sigh......This one must be promoted in our group. I am going to do that right now.
    ~Sonja~

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