Sadness lingers
Sadness lingers,
as I realize you will never be mine.
My dreams begin to dim and dim,
as it seems I will never meet you,
talk to you and hold you,
we won't be in love!
I look down and imagine you with her,
While I am here, willing to love you for all eternity,
willing to make you the happiest man alive!
But you are not here,
you will never be here!
Let my sadness linger and linger,
for my poetry is the only memory
of you that I have left.
Your face has vanished from my mind,
no matter how hard I try.
My sorrowful heart is all I have left,
so let my sadness linger.
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
© Copyrighted 2006
Author notes
Written September 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- biggest contest in allpoetry history! (i hope) need 1,000 entries!! by Gasp.
1300 points, ended July 11, 2007, 638 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended October 9, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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While I appreciate the sentiment here, I do feel that it is cliche in places. Your emotion is strong but I would suggest varying words and using a bit more imagery.
It reads a bit more like a goodbye letter than poetry but that is just my opinion. What one person prefers another may not.
Overall the sentiment is there but I would just like to see a bit more variety. -
that was touching.....sosadit made me feel your pain...........I loved it. awesome job,and keep the pen moving!!!!!!!
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This is very sad and something I can definitely relate to. As well as a lot of others I am sure. The whole idea of unrequited love is a timeless subject for poetry and I think you captured the pure hopelessness of it. How you can love someone so much it hurts but the person has no idea. How feeling sad is the only way you can remain connected to the person. Brilliant write, keep up the great work.
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Wow, your words are absolutely beautiful, the word choice and use of sensory images makes this piece come to life, Very good free form piece, very good. Look forward to more like it
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A nice write. Thantk you forentering..
Sam
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Thank you soo much Hana
Thank you for the applaud too
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This is so beautiful..
There is this sweet magic in your sad words.
"Let my sadness linger and linger,
for my poetry is the only memory
of you that I have left."
We all have been there, we all have done that...so all I can do is hope that you heart heals...and your pain fades away.
~Hana~ -
well I have to say it is NOT Your story
It is mine! 
Thank you for applauding my cute Nermina
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THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL, BUT SAD, AND PLEASE GIVE ME SOMETHING CHEERFUL! ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT ME? I AM GOING TO GET HIM, HE DOESNT KNOW IT YET, BUT I KNOW, SO PLEASE WRITE ME MY SIDE OF THE STORY
LOVELY WRITE, AND TOUCHES HEARTS BECAUSE MANY CAN RELATE TO IT, THE STORY OF MANY OF US, BUT I REFUSE TO MAKE IT MY STORY.
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Thankx Michele. Yeah I'll correct that (I used spell check I swear lol)
Thank you for replying to me so quickly and for the applaud too!
Nooni
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This is very beautifully sad, I can really feel the emotions. It made my heart flutter a little, because I know how this feels...I think you've done a beautiful job with it...
only thing in the second to the last set, the first line, I think there is something wrong there?
Otherwise, brilliant job, I really like it!
Michele
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