I slink into the place.
Stalk across dusty floors littered with bones;
remnants, of meals devoured in fertile times.
None of them was satisfying.
They left me empty - hungering for more.
So I left in search of more heartwarming fare.
I roamed thru painted deserts.
Sauntered thru forbidding forests;
mottled with decaying leaves.
Though I encountered other souls;
I remained an outcast among my kind.
My loneliness echoed across canyons.
A futile journey drives me home,
to whimper in the arms of mother earth;
licking spiritual wounds.
I sniff the putrid air
Searching for trespassers.
Bristle at the scent of foreign blood.
Teeth gleaming - I advance
ready to battle vicious interlopers.
Feral fangs grasp a passive throat.
She reeks of old forsaken dreams,
and pungent bitter memories
fermented by passing years.
Pity bids me to release her;
but a fiery indestructible spirit
lurks beneath her fragile façade.
She turns on me, proud and unbending
while open lacerations weep woes.
I am humbled, and bow before my mate.
Patricia Gibson-Little
Author notes
I’m not sure I followed the challenge description exactly, but then since I’m now residing on outcast island, I don’t have to worry about it. Heck I may tear this one apart and write a totally different poem.
Write a poem that describes you
with the animals characteristics
HOWEVER
do not tell us what animal it is
You must write this about an animal
and yourself
but you cant tell us what animal it is
only its characteristics that you share with it.
Written April 24th, 2003
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Well it's definitely unique... It didn't really strike a cord in me but that sure doesn't mean it's bad... I feel that I might be too honest when I say that I think poems like this are written too often if you understand? But I'm not one to tell you what to do so continue please! Nice write
Supie -
wow. THis was pretty coooool
and ignore that judge last part. Thru was ok lol.
Goodl uck in the survivor round -
This is a very moving and well thought out poetictale, I have really enjoyed reading this piece and I'm pleased to see the challenge has encouraged you to write such a good poem.
If I was to give any kind of critique to an aspect of this piece I didn't like it could only be the use of the word "thru" which seemed to lower the tone of a well written poem.
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