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Lying on tables and counting stars

I was killing the pain
With every pill I slipped into my mouth
And I was lying down on tables
Watching the world spin round

Counting the stars is always hard
And even harder when you’re on drugs
The world is as fucked up as you want it to be
And to me it was coming undone faster and harder
Than the trip that I was on

You tried to save me with every breath
You breathed into my lungs
But I just didn’t want to accept it
Not without the smoke

Wake up darling
The sun is shining for you today
Come outside and play in the street
See which pretty car is moving fast enough
To take your life away

Author notes

you wont like it
and i dont care
Written September 29th, 2006

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  • Flo Varekai
    May 14, 2007

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    Wonderful

    awesome-ness! I somehow reminded me of that movie Girl; Interupted. It's like an opening to a greater story. Wonderful my dear!


  • goddess-of-death
    November 10, 2006
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    im glad you liked it. an im happy that someone finally commented on it. i have to say that that is the one thing that is failing on allpoetry, no one comments anymore. it makes me sad. but thanks for the comment. im glad some one can relate to my randomness. lol.


  • makeout kid
    November 10, 2006
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    you're wrong.
    i happen to like this a lot.
    i can relate.
    it's a wonderful write.
    good job.