While walking through the woods one day.
I saw something in the clearing far away.
It looked big to my momentary dismay.
As I came closer it did not try to run away.
My eyes could not believe what they had seen.
A beautiful Angel with a broken wing.
She had tears in her Angelic eyes.
As she tried to fix her wing to fly.
I knew then that even God's Angel's needed me.
So I approached her on bended knee.
She could not talk but I could understand.
As I took her broken wing in my hand.
There was a connection, there was a feel.
She is my Guardian Angel and she is real!
God had sent her to help me on so many nights,
to help me know the difference between wrong and right.
Now it was my turn to help my Angel so fair,
take her home and give her loving care.
I learned so much from her each new day.
She taught me to believe, keep the faith and pray.
Again becoming a mother and a wife,
God had sent her to help me start a new life.
The weeks passed and her wing was mended,
I was so sorry that our time together had ended.
I found my Angel with a broken wing,
she taught me that life is a gift worth living!
September 29, 2006
Author notes
Option#2 photo bucket
"Death is near"
Option#2 Angels
Written September 29th, 2006
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A contest entry
- The premier poet on ap!! by Little Miss Mozart.
300 points, ended November 7, 2006, 23 entries
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splendid
you really took that picture and just flew with it. your poem just screams "read me, read me" thats what i love to see. good luck in my contest
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Thank you for your contest submission. WOW, i am amazed at this write, it is absolutley wonderful, so hearfelt and touching. The flow is great, the timing well done and the sentiment and story moevement is excellent!!! Thank you so much for sharing this wonderful piece in my contest, my friend ( and letting me see where your SN comes from hehe) Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
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this is a really nice poem. It really is a surprise when you find out that life is really worht living at the end of a happy moment. Good lukc in my contest
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"My eyes could not believe what they had seen.
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a truly sweet and touching poem, dear theresa ...
I still remember when we talked about your inner child, the little girl within you ... the angel with the broken wing very much reminds me of her ... as does your little daughter ...
with so much protection, there is nothing to fear ...
marion
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^_^ a very lovely poem of faith and transformation. I like that this seems to portray sadness and joy at the same time. Thank you for entering.
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I like everything about it; the background, the poem..it's all great. Thanks for the entry.
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww I really really liked this poem... it is such a cute one... very very nicely written!!!!
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Thank you my friend for the comments and the applause it means so much to me
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Thank you dear friend for the kind and caring comments. I don't like to edit either, this is a first time thing for me, I don't know if I will do it again. Thanks for the applause too. your friend and love Theresa
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aww this is a VERY sweet poem. very uplifting, happy, i am so happy for you. OVERJOYED!.. i hope things are going great for you. .. oh and you probably did great with this piece even before you edited it, you have a wonderful way wiht your words, and i know so many people here agree with me, so really, write how you feel it, how you deeply want to write it.. personally i rarely like to change how i write my poetry, even though i know that a lot of it does not fit well together at all, i just wrote what i felt inside, and i figure i ended up writing it that way in the first place so it must of been meant to be written like that.. well take care my friend.. xoxoxo love much ~Ashley~
i send you BIG, WARM hugs~
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I am finished editing this poem, I hope that it is better. Please judge it now. Thanks for all the time to work on it. I appreaciate it. Theresa
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Return for editing.
Good morning Theresa!!....This is such a beautiful poem....I am feeling a bit anxious when it comes to "trying to help Poets edit their work"....I feel, that poems can revised and edited a thousand times in thousand different ways by a thousand different Poets....but it is my job to review this entry with an unbiased opinion, and help a bit if I can, to get the best write out of you possible...
For a rhyming poem, the tonge can NOT slip...Mine stubled a couple of times...BUT......if you go back in and re-read your work, I think you are going to see what I am talking about...I have read your work...You are a great artist and full of talent...I just want this poem to be the best it can be....Here are a few verses I picked right up off the mat....>>>
to help me know wrong and help me know right.
Again becoming a mother and a wife, I knew then
that God had sent her to help me start a new life.
I was the lucky one on that day.
Edit as many times as you wish....ask for my opinion as many times as you wish....ask other Poets for their comments as well....I will judge this when you are COMPLETELY satisfied....SMILE!!...It's better with a frown turned upside down.
Sincerely...Arkbear....aka...John.
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Thank you so much I am really having trouble with the flow and finding the right words any suggestions would be appreciated. Thank you for the kind and wonderful comments again. Theresa
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needs just a bit of editing...add a few adjec
Hey Tawk!
A beuatiful write here...your editing was better...I do have to agree with Aurielle though....the flow was a "bit" off...because of the nature of a rhyming poem, it must flow without slipping on the tounge....Every stance, should have almost as many syllables as the first....HOWEVER, it is still a gorgeous work of art you have penned....If you want a bit of help, you can ask other Poets who have enterd for some suggestions...or you can ask me...but I will answer with only the knowledge I have for rhymig poems....I am not a professional writer, but I do know when the flow is off....and so will the other "experienced Poets" who are going to be reviewing your work...Adding a few adjectives will give this piece a REAL bounce!!...Let me know if you need some help!..SMILE! ...It's a poem you should be PROUD of!
I know I am!
Sincerely...Arkbear...aka...John.
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Thank you so much for the caring and kind comments they really mean so much to me. Thanks again Theresa
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Thank you for your kind and caring comments. Theresa
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Thank you for the kind and caring comments they mean so much and thank you for the applause Theresa
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awww...! this is soo sweet!... i loved the sweet innocence n love in this poem..! giving back love to the one who has watched over you so far!
I loved the fact that u rhymed! yay!
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The flow was on and off but it was interesting story made me want to read. How you compared your wife to a faerie cute but I felt you needed maybe some orginal metahpros or personfication or try comparing you wife to something else orginal
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Wow...this is really good. It's very spiritually moving and it's just a great work of art.
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Thank you so much for the kind and wonderful comments. Theresa
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Thank you dear friend for the lovely comments they mean so much. Theresa
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, yes there are truly Angels among us. Thanks again Theresa
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this is amazing. a very beautiful and touching story to it. the rhyme and rhytm was lovely. i love the background you have. its very pretty.
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A poem of such hope.You were able to repay a great favour by healing your Guardian Angel.Well done, I really liked this one, Ros
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a very touching poem which shows that there are still people who give hope to others to survive in the big wide world...
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Thank you dear friend for the nice comments they mean so much. Theresa
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Thank you sis, you have one too, I know because I never seen mine either but I know now that they were there for me. Keep the faith, I will pray for you. Thanks again for the wonderful comments. Love you sis
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Thank you for the kind and caring comments. Theresa
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Thank you for the kind comments and being so helpful, I am so new to this whole poetry thing, I have been writing since June, I tried to change the lines that you wanted, I hope that you like it better now. It was a challenge for me. Thanks again Theresa
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This is abeautiful and captivating piece well done
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This is so beautiful.You are so lucky to see your angel. I wish I could see one. I need one. I am so lost and alone.
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Loved the meaning to this life truly is worth living even when our wings get a little broken, there is nothing in life that cain't be reparied wonderful write and thanks for sharing.
Love and Light
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Gorgeous
Theresa....this is one of the most beautiful rhymes I have ever read.....However, there are a couple of lines which took away from the flow....but NOT away from the vividness and imagery you displayed thoughout the entire write....If you want, you can go back in and edit...I will review it again...IF YOU WANT.....
lines...6....13....20
Such a lovely story...I really mean it when I say this is by far one of the best rhyming poems I have read....Your choice of words are incredible...Simple..but STRONG....These few verses here are gorgeous..>>
My eyes could not believe what they had seen.
There in the clearing a beautiful Angel with a broken wing.
She had tears in her Angelic eyes.
As she tried to fix her wing to fly.
I knew then that even God's Angel's needed me.
So I approached her on bended knee.
She could not talk but I could understand.
She was the most beautiful Angel in the land. :
Such profound beauty in this....Best of luck!....Y'all are making this tough on me!..So much talent....It's going to be a hard contest to judge.
Sincerely...Arkbear.
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Thank you dear friend for the applause and the wonderful and kind comments. love Theresa
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Thank you dear sister for the wonderful comments they mean so much to me. Thanks again and Love Theresa
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Thank you for the kind and caring comments. I am so glad that you liked my poem. Thanks again Theresa
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Thank you for your kind comments. They mean so much.
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Thank you for liking my poem, I just wrote from the heart. Thanks again for the kind comments.
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Thank you my dear friend for the kind and caring comments, they really mean the world to me.
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Theresa this is a lovely poem that you had penned here my dear friend good luck in the contest
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TawK,
This is very well written. Nice flow and rhythm til the end. So beautifully said, very enjoyable to read.
Such a joy to think you could have a chance to meet your Angel. Lord knows I owe mine many thanks.
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This is absolutely beautiful Im god smacked, this poem made me cry, I believe in angels I know their here to help and you described these beautiful beings down to a tee. Great words and a beautiful picture to boot. Just goes to show if you give you recieve twice as much back.
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Excellent
This poem brings many thoughts to mind. What a precious experience. Thank God for our Angels. Thank the Angels for staying on duty for us.
Nice touch, Things that I had not done for sometime, I knew that God had sent her to me to help me start a new life. -
that was like mesmerizing it was so good it just wanted me to keep reading it really good job
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Beautiful piece Theresa!! What a lovely image this gave, of you being there to heal your angel as she has done for you all your life. Wonderfully written!! Best of luck in this contest!
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Thanks for the kind comments. Theresa
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Nice poem and nice name of a title Good luck in the contest.
Kari
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