Speaking to the devil on uneven grounds. angelic tones passing through lips red as the stain from an old nose bleed.
this life won't last long enough to get you where you want. never will it bend to meet your needs. as glass will shatter in the eyes who throw the rock. life hits hard as you try to take it.
heated paranoia with cruel intentions. whispered love and screamed fears. passion like porn. don't look them in the eyes dear, their animals on prosac.
tired eyes stare vacantly at a speck of dirt in the floor.
mascara stained cheeks cringe into a smile that smothers the pain into the soothing aroma of rain on asphalt.
and therein lies deciet.
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Written September 28th, 2006
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Very good use of imagery!
the metaphores you use are powerful and thought provoking. the second stanza, "this life won't last long enough to get you where you want. never will it bend to meet your needs. as glass will shatter in the eyes who throw the rock. life hits hard as you try to take it." i especially liked that one
again, well done poet, thank you.
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wow thanks.
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i really think is a very good poem. you've brought forward some things which are very, very true--some things which i've been thinking about in the past few weeks.i like the structure you used here. it makes your poem seem more narrative. it makes it easier to grasp what you've said. well done
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Some profound truths and statements made in these lines - deep and dark thoughts brought to the forefront with this poem.
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wonderfull! soo great discriptive work! Imagenary ..
no more to say
Keep writing
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lovely
O my freakin gosh!! darlin this was wonderful. The figuritive language was spetcular. passion like porn.... that was great. I would like to hear from you sometime. my intrnternet is off again. man it sucks, but leave me messages on my page and I will definetley answer it. Good job and hope to talk to you soon.-obsi -
I miss you, we hardly talk any more.
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I miss you and your work Stefani. You're amazing. This is a great poem. But you probably already knew that because you're amazing.
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Holly Crap I love this so full of imagery and passion.
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