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Wake up

last night it was great morrow when i slept,

to reveal the facts that hurt and still which i kept,

with mild fascinating bang of clock,

i found myself in a dock,

with breeze somewhat like fragrance of rose,

moreover that aroma, touched to close.

A little bird flied to touch the water,

in a hope to catch a fish to gratify his crater,

not once or twice it continued in thousands,

but keeping faith in himself, not changing the trends,

he continued till he sweat at all,

like a dribbling of ball.

Soon, a small fish came out to feel the light,

that was the instance for bird to delight,

he defeated the defeat with painstaking effort,

to keep alive his wish which was never abort.

By seeing this all made a sudden woke up ,

keeping all in mind my problems broke up.

With giggles on face and with clearing all doubt

to see the bright day i moved out.

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Written September 28th, 2006

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  • Kari gold member
    September 29, 2006
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    Good Luck!

    Thank you so much for your tribute.It means a lot to me and I love how unique it is.It did put a smile on my face and the best of luck to you in the contest

    Kari

    • only1newstar
      August 23, 2008
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      Thanks Kari

      I am glad that my peoms works too, Thanks for apreciation.
      You must be thinking that i am replying almost after 2 years,
      I was out my poetic world to furnish a better engineering career. But I am back,
      I like your creations too, hope to read more from you too...
      Best Wishes.


  • Princess-nee
    September 28, 2006
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    Inspiring,Hopeful and diplomatic poem.A differnt style,a different approach I see here.Yet it rhymed and words flowed well.I like the concept behind it,It's about keeping faith in onesself.And the last lines made me smile.Beautiful thoughts. for our freind Kari,I hope she like it..
    Best of luck with the contest...

    • only1newstar
      August 23, 2008
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      Thanks AutumnPoet

      Thanks for reading and appreciating my poem,
      I think i told you my name but i dont know yours name..
      I like your poems, looking forward to read more of yours..


  • Firequeen
    September 28, 2006
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    what a wonderful piece you have here
    ty so much for your entry
    Good luck to you
    firequeen

    • only1newstar
      August 23, 2008
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      Thanks Firequeen

      Thanks for appreciating my work, I hope to produce more and much better that my previous ones...

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