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In The Whispers

In The Whispers

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Night, call from distant land

of shining Castles

of shining coast

In the whispers, of dark

I understand

Willow, stretch out Thy hand

in pale moonlight

in placid midnight

In the whispers, a stir

To touch my hand

Breeze, course across the fear

to breathe with me

to breathe for me

In the whispers, a breath

Only I hear

Wave, shine Thy guiling dance

through current’s storm

through fleeting form

In the whispers, a sheen

I see per chance

Embrace, reach outside Thine own

and still the fear

and still be here

In the whispers, encircle

Us as one

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Written September 28th, 2006

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  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    April 28, 2007

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    A tad difficult to read because of the background colours but a beautiful poem nonetheless.

    Willow, stretch out Thy hand

    in pale moonlight

    in placid midnight

    In the whispers, a stir

    To touch my hand


    Beautiful lines here.


  • heartnsoul
    March 24, 2007

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    My dear sir, you have a way of taking the hearts strings and playing them softly, sweetly like a classical guitar or violin. Then when you are done you take them ever so gently and tie them carefully, tenderly into a perfect bow releasing a heartfelt sigh. For its all I can do after reading your work, viewing your art. Just....sigh...
    I dare say the pen feels and acts much like the brush for you. The movements fluid, graceful, elegant and most refreshingly charming. It is sheer joy to read you. My pc having been down, the withdrawals were horrendous. LOL
    ~Michelle~


  • Cat gold member
    January 21, 2007
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  • debilynn gold member
    January 19, 2007
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    i was told by someone today that i should read your poetry and now i can understand why. this is breathtakingly beautiful. your use of imagery is wonderful. you are quite talented. keep on writing. God bless you


  • October 15, 2006
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    ~simply breathtaking~

    the softness of your words is deeply felt as you take the reader on a beautiful & tender journey of love, not spoken in words, simply meant to be felt.
    the softness with which your words evoke, is etheral as the closeness of two is so strong; doubts & fears disappear as quickly as they came replaced by a quiet sanctuary where two have created their blissful haven.

    your writing is magnificent in this very beautiful poem!!
    it is my pleasure to read such a breathtaking poem.
    ~lynn~


  • Nicole Cudworth
    October 13, 2006
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    Another beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing.


  • Katie Lazette
    September 30, 2006
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    excellent

    Excellent write Bob, I'm glad I clicked on to read this. I haven't been on only once in a while, since I have removed all of my poetry, but I like to log onto AP and see who is doing what. I don't have enough points to applaud. What's with the photo?


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    September 29, 2006
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    oh wow i don't even know how to say how beautiful this is.
    i'm honestly lost for words.
    simply outstanding, and so on and so on...
    really loved it, thanks for sharing.
    i'll be back to read some more.
    joyce

    i must thank rick for leading me to you.

    i also read your author page,
    sounds like you really lived your life, and you done well, you should be proud.
    you like your brother has a God given talent.
    Bless you both.


  • rlmcmd
    September 28, 2006
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    Thands Victoria,
    Your very sweet. I may get some sleep now, as I was up til' 3am writing this. I have two novels in the works also, and have a three day weekend that I think I shall devote to writing. Rick and I are going to try to get the final edition of "Words Of Love For Women" uploaded to the printer this weekend, so that should be a hoot. It will be hard-bound, color with 96 glossy pages, about 75 of his poems and five of mine. It sould be out in a month... hopefully, if we can get the final proofs ok'ed, send gallies out and get them back from the reviewers, etc. Sounds like a long weekend in more ways than one. Bob


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    September 28, 2006
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    awesome

    Well i do say you and your brother have struck a chord within me today. Both of you touched my heart with your words. I totally enjoyed this piece and the show of emotion has me speechless. thanks for sharing it. I agree, this i think is one of my favs by you. BRAVO!
    Much love
    Vsutton

  • rlmcmd
    September 28, 2006
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    Thanks Rick, that makes it worth staying up until 3am writing it seem worth while. It was something I needed to get out of me. We may want to take something I wrote for the book out and insert this instead. Bob


  • Endeavor gold member
    September 28, 2006
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    Excellent x 2

    Perhaps one of your finest works in words. I am humbled by your writings here.

    Embrace, reach outside Thine own

    And still the fear

    And still be here

    In the whispers, encircle
    Us as one

    Excellentx2

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