Follow me, I'll lead you away from here
You won't miss any of what we leave behind
The words you won't say show in your eyes, your fear
The only thing I can think is 'cruel to be kind'
Take my hand and trust in me
I'll never let you go too far
Don't be afraid of what you can't see
You can't be afraid of what you are
Don't try to hide the light in your eyes
You know you can't scare me away
Don't try to force feed me your lies
I know that you need me, please let me stay
Follow my eyes into the dark
You love me, I know you will
My bite is far worse than my bark
You'll feel them both, I'll savor the kill
Don't try to hide the light in your eyes
I want to watch it fade
The part of me that loves you dies
Your body stays where it's laid
I'll find my way away from you
I won't look back, never
I shake with tears, it's sad but true
A love so perfect can't last forever
Author notes
I love this poem, it's so dark and disturbing......it's delicious! it makes me sad though.....so yeah, hope you had fun reading it.
Written September 27th, 2006
A contest entry
- diabla. by Dawliah.
900 points, ended July 24, 8 entries
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First off, even though it will appear repititious I love the feel of this as if you are speaking to me and me alone. It's a great way to grab your readers attention and hold it until they are finished. I enjoyed it so much that I had to read it again. This is beautifully seductive, loved these lines in particular
Follow my eyes into the dark
you love me, I know you will
my bite is far worse than my bark
you'll feel them both, I'll savor the kill
don't try to hide the light in your eyes
I want to watch it fade
chilling
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My favorite lines were
"Follow my eyes into the dark
You love me, I know you will
My bite is far worse than my bark
You'll feel them both, I'll savor the kill"
love love LOVE it! Awesome wicked poem Billy
~Oka
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a good piece, ah yes, love it seems always ends up on the darker side of the heart while eye flicker madness and sorrow.
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perfect
a dark and soul chiling poem with a pinch of romance in it. i love this poem!!
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excellent~
Great poem for the prompt
Nice to meet you as well...I don't do many dark one but this was like you were talking to me as so many have said..
I hope you come give one of my poems a read..I just a Question and Answer survey
Not many reads on that one and it's my newest....would love for you to drop by
Best of luck in this contest
Susan~~~
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I loved it!!
What a great job you did in writing this. It is a very compelling read. It reminds me of my Daughter ClaudiaDelacourts Vampire writes. Good work!!! FeysRealm
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You've been on here quite a long time - so young when you first got on too. Good for you to keep writing like this. Like you are talking to me directly when I read this. Sentiments well expressed, easy to read and understand. Thanks for commenting on Troubled Teen this morning. Have a great day.
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I love this poem it seems as your talking strait to me...It was a wonderful read.
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a good dark piece of poetry which you have written here, an enjoyable poem, good flow to it. thank you for sharing. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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cool
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