A tranquil fountain
serenly whispers aquatic music
symphonic droplets
strike tones that resonate
with life and love
Mourning-doves awake
unfurl their wings in the early sun
relinquishing precious songs
A lush richly-petalled luminescent garden
furnished with vibrant orchids
fragrent lilocs that bloom summer love
mesmerizing
Author notes
Written September 26th, 2006
A contest entry
- la la la love! by j-ay rose.
535 points, ended March 8, 2007, 75 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Language: 4/10
Overall Effect: 3/10
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This is a pretty good start. I would have liked to seen more though. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Wonderfully written!
I really enjoyed reading this. It was wonderfully written.
The imagery, and flow of this is great! You also seem to have a very vivid vocabulary. The words that you've chosen to use were perfect for this piece. You used unique words, without it being a "thesaurus overload." You did a very nice job in writing this. The overall piece has a very tranquil feeling to it. You seem to have a wonderful talent for writing. I hope to read more from you soon.
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Your words are quite mesmerizing, this is beautiful, tranquil and has me caught in the moment. A lovely poem that will inspire good dreams (I'm about to go to bed ) Great job, and I'll come by to read some more tomorrow
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Nice description here. Your choice of words really flowed beautifully and moulded together really well! Much enjoyed!
~Avalin~
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