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Dreams

Which dreams come true

and which dreams lay down.

Do day dreams come true?

Our movie tale dreams of the dawn.


A dance after a dance,

One in suit and one in jeans.

Just themselves,

In a living room...


Fantasy we can deal with out,

Leave out nightmares behind,

Erotic can stay in our heads,

But can't our day dreams appear...

...when we want them too?


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Written September 26th, 2006

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  • Epsilina
    September 28, 2006
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    This poem was not really meant for the purpose of it being good, this poem was meant to try to get a point through one of my friends thick skulls, they know what it means, and I posted it because I wanted to see if people would take it odd ways, which sometimes happens. I'm sorry you could not handle whatever I said you earlier.


  • DarkHunter
    September 28, 2006
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    If you can actually make this poem make any sence please let me know at a later date. This really is shocking work. The use of the word true twice in the first stanza was just the begining of a slippery slope for this poem - if you can call this a poem. There is no structure in this poem, atleast mine made sense and it was from my heart as a tribute for my wife. Love carried the flow in my poem, what was your inspiration here? Drugs? Shouldn't with out be without? And the line Leave out nightmares behind- shouldn't that be our. Anyway, I don't think that you are in any position to insult my work as this piece clearly demonstrates your inabilty as a poet. James.