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Hell Walk

A sound, less than a whisper, more than a breath of sighs . . .


Gritty, dangerous feel to it that grabs your guts and slides


them round till they twist your senses, sanity evaporates.


Loathsome worms of some dead flesh, an odor foul creates.


There it is again, sackcloth dragged across granite boulders,


A wisp of fog from darkest hell wraps itself around your throat.


starts to drag you into darkness where bloody gobbets of flesh float.


Last thought on your mind then is that the pain is just as you feared,


as limb from limb you are torn and every nerve ending is seared,

 

fleshy snags tossed to the bloody jaws of  a sulfurous hell. 

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Written September 26th, 2006

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  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    Wonderful writing, poetically a beauty of a poem!
    A sound, less than a whisper, more than a breath of sighs . . .

    Gritty, dangerous feel to it that grabs your guts and slides

    them round till they twist your senses, sanity evaporates.

    Loathsome worms of some dead flesh, an odor foul creates.

    those are my favorite stanza's because it does talk
    about the triggers of hell approaching contemporarily...
    dread, anxiety, apathy and anguish....

    pre-cursors and perhaps rsvp's asking us to join
    the team of hell.

    ears/Seattle
    Beauty of a poem well written and so very smartly
    done!


  • vici377
    February 10, 2008
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    amazing imagery and total darkness....absolutely love
    A wisp of fog from darkest hell wraps itself around your throat.



    starts to drag you into darkness where bloody gobbets of flesh float.

    can just picture this happening..a true sign of a great write..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..


  • Luminescence
    February 8, 2008
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    EWE.... lol.... it is gory a little but it is very nicely done.... I agree with Lanivity that was a wonderful line... it gives great discription and I loved the choices of words that you used in it..... great poem.... great poem...

    Thank you for entering and good luck,

    ~Lumin


  • Lanivitybeauty
    February 8, 2008
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    wow, my heart is racing just from reading this!
    These lines: Last thought on your mind then is that the pain is just as you feared,
    as limb from limb you are torn and every nerve ending is seared,

    Nothing seals the terrified feeling more.

    Good luck!
    Lanivity


  • blondone
    January 26, 2008
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    Oh Oh so dark the imagery is a grandstand love the flow thank you so much for entering


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    December 15, 2006
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    Amazing

    This poem is truly amazing and wonderfully written, giving me chills right down to my toes.

    A dark and scary place you have here. The poem is written with a fluid flow and conjures frightening imagery.

    Truly a perfect poem.

    Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance.

    Rosemary


  • WolfHeart
    October 1, 2006
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    I am honored by your words. Thank you for reading and commenting. I write everything, but love the dark poetry.

    hugs WolfHeart


  • Night Terrors
    October 1, 2006
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    This is one of the best I have read so far! I love the images I get from this they are utterly astounding! You have a real gift! I'm just glad to experience a small taste of it!


  • WolfHeart
    September 26, 2006
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    Coming from the mistress of the dark, this is an especially appreciated comment! Dark writes are my best genre, but I never go there very often.
    hugs Wolfie


  • WolfHeart
    September 26, 2006
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    Thank you for reading. It even creeped me out. Had to take the fly swatter into the bathroom in case something came out of the mirror. Your comments are so appreciated!

    hugs WolfHeart


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    September 26, 2006
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    Wow, this is so good!! Dark and frightening, like a vivid nightmare. Terrific writing. Best of luck in the contest. Jeannie


  • JohnWaynePalsy
    September 26, 2006
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    wonderful

    broke out the good whiskey for this party.that is a really great piece of writing.it read like dusk wrapped in black silk.extremely smooth and pulling ones mind ever deeper down into the whirlpool of a night time ocean.


  • BeautifulCalamity08
    September 26, 2006
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    WOW...this piece is so amazing....this is a wonderful piece...I love the picture that goes along with the poem....

    Good Luck in the Contest!

    With Words Of Love and Hope,
    Musyk


  • suthrnbell84
    September 26, 2006
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    This was creepy, but still very good. I don't usually like creepy. It creeps me out. And this definetly did.

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