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Distant

Layers of make up cover the truth

a past that most don't see

Scared of rejections and being alone

her sole never finds peace


Losing herself she paints on a face

and covers up her pain

Praying that one day someone will come

and take this all away


Pools of her sorrow form at her feet

tears smearing her disguise

Warped and confused she falls to her knees

still beautiful in his eyes.


Leading her forward and clutching her hand

he makes her laugh again

She tried not to hope its too soon to dream

that she'll find love with him


Her face basked in warmth with her smile so bright

she puts her heart on the line

She wipes of her make up, revealing herself

there is nothing left to hide


His touch is so gentle yet strangely distant

her mind is clouded with doubt

But shell wait for him to decide if he wants her

for whoever she becomes now.

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Written September 25th, 2006

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  • StonerChica
    October 28, 2006
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    oooh nice, i like this piece. my favorite part she wipes off her makeup revealing herself theres nothing left to hide. good job


  • Roseleaf
    October 28, 2006
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    I truly enjoyed this very much and can relate what woman wouldn't and thanks for keeping my mind open to what I know inside it makes you ponder on if you didn't know your age how old would u be perhaps the beauty gone from the face has rised into her soul and it needs to be felt not seen

    Love pauline


  • the gunslinger
    October 22, 2006
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    don't go

    i've decided


  • blueyez
    October 19, 2006
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    I really enjoyed your poem here! My favorite line:
    Her face basked in warmth with her smile so bright

    she puts her heart on the line

    She wipes of her make up, revealing herself

    there is nothing left to hide


    Falling in love can make us so vulnerable and I think this write really captures that feeling!


  • Avalin
    September 25, 2006
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    Good write, I know loads of girls like this who paint on a face so they can get through the day in the hope that somebody will see them as beautiful. When in fact the process of this has only gone and covered up their real beauty and their mask is clouding who they really are! Your poem really highlighted this! Much enjoyed!

    ~Avalin~

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