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In a Crowd...

The city never sleeps

going, going, going

all around us, like drones...on and on they go

the crowds are endless

lost in this sea of people i feel nothing

surrounded by souls yet lonely

feeling nothing

having no one

only myself.


You feel it too

among the crowds i pass you by

our eyes meeting for barely a glance

yet faces etched into our memories

reality revealed in a half second.

scarce can it be called contact but...

the sparkle in your eyes evident

are you also alone?


i walk on...

not realizing immediately

unknown to us both

connection lost

the crowd swallows us again

what if?

but if so then why...here, now?

not meant to be


and we're alone in the crowd

together yet so alone. 

Author notes

this is for you, laura
because i know exactly how you feel.
Written September 25th, 2006

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  • My Solitude
    March 16, 2007
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    well written.


  • BekkBekk
    December 27, 2006

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    "The city never sleeps
    going, going, going
    all around us, like drones...on and on they go
    the crowds are endless
    lost in this sea of people i feel nothing
    surrounded by souls yet lonely
    feeling nothing
    having no one
    only myself."

    For me, I can totally relate to this because I grew up in Wyoming, and then to come to a big city...it throws you off balance. Also, the feeling of glancing at some one and thinking, "we could be something together" does happen...but not a lot.

    Your voice was very strong here, you had a point and you stuck to it. The narration was great. I felt like you were talking to me, trying to explain an idea or a feeling. It's just an all around great poem. I enjoyed it very much. Please continue writing!


  • panegyric ink
    November 10, 2006
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    I always love conflicts such as these! Always the soul read loud ...and for the reader!


  • TorturedLifeandSoul
    October 17, 2006
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    Wow i love this! It's awesome. You're a fantastic poet. You're so totally awesome! this is one of my favorites of yours. Great write.


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    October 8, 2006
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    marvelous work...extremely wonderful, wow, your work is nicely done..very jaw-dropping, bone-binding, mouth-watering, this work is smashing good..anyway, cheer up my friend glad that din happen to you..lick your wounds and just wait and see a new day, a new sun and just forget about what happened yesterday, the day before, or that that happened to you..a murderer's a murderer, don't blame yourself for what had happened or don't surround yourself with depression cuz ure worth living and to what happen to that girl was a tragedy..aren't you glad that incident happen before he actually hooked up with ur sister? that just shows u 1 thing..even if u know the person very well sometimes something may spark in his/her life that could change him into either something evil or something good...cheer up my friend...brilliant poem!!

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