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Rosalind


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

shall I read

now that twilight

has stolen up on the platform

stilling the flowers

stealing the gold that crept the length of the towers? 


who shall I read?

 a mystery will not quell my disquiet,

every one in history has died.

I am not so bold as to disturb

their slumber,


Shall I listen to the katydids and crickets?

Surely there is no evil in that symphony,

no wayward words

that have only the ring of truth

modulated by eyes

that shift back and forth

like butterflies catching at sunbeams

and shadows. 


Shall I drift into sleep?

In each estuary I see you slowly undressing,

while the river makes small noises

as it drifts around the bent twigs

and falling leaves

until I am weary of the half I do not have.

an unquiet salve, that. 


the murmur of voices threatening;

an isolated laugh.

Before the petals disperse,

much must be explained in Arden Forest,

before the last gasp of the light

the shadows die

and the owls ask questions of the night.

Malignant wights singing

in my head

drowning the easy words

with cruel fingers,

no, not sleep. 


A game of Solitaire

where the meaning of victory

isn’t very clear. I shall watch the kittens play.

Perhaps later I’ll write a poem about fear. 

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Written September 25th, 2006

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  • MissingBatteries
    September 13

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    Ah this was an enjoyable read to be sure. Your imagery was well used and, while diverse, seemed to flow well together. Great write, and thank you for sharing!

  • luvdrkchocolate
    March 18, 2008

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    Wow. This is pretty interesting stuff that you have going on here. I think this is one of the best poems that I have read tonight. I like all the questions you have and the way you answered them. I liked the first stanza best because I like the way you presented night falling. And I thought it was interesting with the way you questioned the meaning of winning solitare. It made me stop and think. Because I think you're right about what that actually implies. How strange.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 9, 2008
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    What a trip you have taken us on, down the river of creativity, through these wonderful words you have penned together to present such a scene, filled with noise and creatures of the night. Enjoyed the alliteration, the senses that were stimulated in course of reading this poem, and the ending. Perhaps you will too.


  • CountryCousin
    March 9, 2008

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    Unique.

    This is very unique and you can hear the persons words in this poem. A lot of thinking is done and because of that the poem has a great deal of depth. One to be read again.

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    March 9, 2008
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    ah ARDEN FOREST the BARD's 'stomping ground of fantasy' and ROSALIND/ROSALIND one of the more 'overlooked' of female heroines this was very good evocative:"before the last gasp of the light

    the shadows die

    and the owls ask questions of the night.


    Malignant wights singing" good ending thanks for taking us again to ARDEN regards zaj


  • Cannonsfire
    December 21, 2006

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    Images that become real life when you read into your words, I so enjoyed the journey transforming everything that was bland tonight into one of pure light. Thank you so much for the read.


  • Birchwood
    December 21, 2006

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    I don't have a reasonable critique for this -- simply wonderful.

    As I sit here with snotty nose, tissues piled around (not from a cold, I suspect, but from allergies which have grown more and more intense every year since about 27; before which I had none), boxes of Bill's ebay shit piled around; birds chirbbling (I don't care if it isn't a word); ferrets somewhere stealing pens or shitting in corners; piles of junk in the yard that I can't seem to get anyone in the house to take responsibility for and get rid of; a wee wee bit of grading left for the semester that is taking me much much longer than it should; half a cup of cold coffee in front of me; the sound of garbage trucks and far off turnpikes wafting through the windows; mental notes of things I want to work on during the break strangling my consciousness; housemates' drug problems, families distance, credit cards and home equity loans, ambitions that aren't supporting themselves ... as I sit here with half a headache, the softness of your scene is such a relief .. the simpleness of missing a lost lover makes me want to weep.

    Actually .. I might have wanted to do that anyway, but this just reminds me of that.


  • SEA angel gold member
    December 21, 2006
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    Captivating

    SPECTACULAR vivid imagery and mood. You draw your reader into a dance with words that seems to tiptoe with the style of the greatest poets. Yet with your own individualistic flair and style you maintain complete control. Publishable good! Excellent writing!!!


  • Poet of Dreams
    November 13, 2006
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    hmm...interesting. very interesting. i liked alot of the visualizations you put into there. i could picture most things very well. i was caught a bit off gaurd by the seeing you undress. or w.e line it is. for a split second it reminded me of the song Voyeur by Blink 182. but i was glad it didnt make that big of a turn. a good write.

    Good write and God bless
    Pastoral Poet
    Ben B.


  • wandering eyes
    November 13, 2006
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    deep

    this has such a wonderful flow, and has such depth to it...

    peace, love, and all that jazz...


  • Carve In Technetium
    September 27, 2006
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    I love it! It's amazingly well written, lovely flow!

    - A.I.


  • September 27, 2006
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    cool

  • PalmettoSky
    September 27, 2006
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    Well, done and thank you for sharing. I think you did an outstanding job on this poem. Another magnificent poem to your collection. This is a great poem. I love it all... the poem, the background, the topic....it's all great. there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways. You rock....


  • cvillelisa
    September 27, 2006
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    @


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    September 27, 2006
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    Very nice Lute
    Not episodic but a whole weaving.

  • Lex Majeska
    September 27, 2006
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    *****/5

    I like this it feels almost transcendental and very very strong I like the slow tone to help it carry and feeling here.


  • seraphim shock
    September 27, 2006
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    I love it. it really sounded like an eighteenth century poet and the idea of the symphony and solitare and the cat is really well written....good work!


  • forever dreaming
    September 27, 2006
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    Wonderfully written piece you have here, so well thought out and put together.The clever use of everyday words creates a vividly striking piece of poetry. It flows effortlessly along from start to finish.Well done to you.

  • Miss Yorik
    September 27, 2006
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    Dreamy, thoughtful, creative. This is a beautiful poem. Somehow easier to understand and perceive than some of your others. This one seems to be more logical, yet still flowing and imaginative. I love the title, too. Beautiful job.

    thanks for the read.

    Melanie


  • passionvine
    September 27, 2006
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    Mystical and True to Wild Bill

    This needs to be nailed to a tree.

    Especially love the katydids and malignant wights.

    You soundly wrestled these emotions (including fear) to the ground. No wonder the ladies (and especially Rosalind) adore you.

    Peace.

    Edited on Sep 27, 7:19 because ''.


  • plinkyponk
    September 26, 2006
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    i feel a sad yearning -its terrible when theres no macdonalds around i could feelthe pathos.....its a beautiful write it sort of gets you in the heart but then you feel a bit better at the end when the normal kitten comes in and then the normal thing about writing and then its just about fear making that seem normal somehow big sigh at the end phew.otherwise i could have screamed but then i am hypersensitive after half past ten...


  • JohnWaynePalsy
    September 26, 2006
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    outstanding

    that was one of the most interesting bits of writing ive read recently and the most interesting by far today.its very strange to me im not even sure how im feeling about it or actually how it made me feel reading it.i loved it but i think it requires further reading and time to soak in and for me to look at it from its various angles.its way freekin awesome


  • BeautifulCalamity08
    September 26, 2006
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    Wonderful!!!

    this is an amazing part....

    shall I read

    now that twilight

    has stolen up on the platform

    stilling the flowers

    stealing the gold that crept the length of the towers?


    truly spectacular!!!

    With Words Of Love and Hope,
    Musyk


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    September 26, 2006
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    Wonderfully written, loved the form and flow. The emotions in this piece are tangible and captivating. great write, keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny


  • paullallady silver member
    September 26, 2006
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    this has such a soft fluid flow to it and I love
    that. it is descriptive and story telling and
    it is like watching someone unawares. good job.


  • MermaidSinging
    September 26, 2006
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    It's a castle and hollow hallways echoing departures from every room. Too much time to think and view...need TV...makes us all stupid and complacent. Who needs love or sorrow when you've got manufactured reality to keep you occupied. Even cards are too silent when your mind won't stop. Leave the forest and the glen. Go to the city where the noise will deaden all.
    Edited on Sep 26, 9:37 because ''.


  • myrataal silver member
    September 26, 2006
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    Brilliant

    If confronted with choices, the soul will turn to itself: known and peaceful in knowing, not confronted or asked to explain or please; only the need to be. Solitaire.

    Within your poem many pictures turned to life. Slowly you wrote your poems inside my soul; slowly I recognized some called my own; slowly dreams' repetition became obscured inside a private tautology.


    To reinforce that which all senses know: this life is a good goodbye.

    Myra


  • Desiree Darkk
    September 26, 2006
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    Sometimes late at night when I cannot sleep (like tonight) I like to sit on the sofa in the dark with a flashlight, turn it on so the beam hits the ceiling. And no matter where my cat is, he comes out of hiding, then I shine the light on the floor and make circles and watch him chase it all around and up the wall. He's very smart but apparently not smart enough to know I'm playing with him.

    Then sometimes I get on line and read good poetry. Like tonight.

    Desiree

  • cvillelisa
    September 25, 2006
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    This is quite what The Bear said isn't it. Makes me go

    Sigh.

    Roslind is special. I like her. I saw As you like it recently. Well this year anyway. My grandmother taught me how to play Solitare. I used to play for hours and hours. Her cards were very soft and easy to shuffle. She taught me to shuffle too. When you win - it seems kind of special. Like you are winning against some Magician who you can't see. Well that is what I used to think. I like the sounds the cards make when you flip them down, 1, 2, 3. Course you probably play on the computer or something.

    Shall I listen to the katydids and crickets? (Yes)
    Shall I drift into sleep? (Yes, especially if you are dreaming that undressing dream).


    or watch the kittens play. Definitely. Or prop one up on your tummy and use it as a book holder until you fall asleep. Thats a good idea. Just not a really really heavy book.

    Okies. I go now. Probably be back to this one tho.





  • The Bear
    September 25, 2006
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    This poem has sat down next to me and plucks at nerve endings like they are harp strings (or maybe lute strings)
    Of course, the last stanza resonates.
    Edited on Sep 25, 4:57 p.m. because ''.

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