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Here..

Im holding you, but your not really there
im hugging you, but your minds else where
i try to sit still and respect how you feel
but i love you so much, my heart just cant deal


I understand everything when you try to explain
I understand everything, because i feel exactly the same
the feeling of hatred and discust for yourself
the thoughts of suicide that you keep on the shelf


Im here for you always, i need you to know
i love you immensly, though i find it hard to show
hope you can understand, what im trying to say
in my heart forever, is where you shall stay

Author notes

Yeah...i wrote this a while ago n recently just found it...its nuttin great, think i wrote it in like 5 minutes...but yeah...
Written September 25th, 2006

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  • torn thru the core
    July 5, 2007
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    wow theres so much emotion in this that it's almost overwhealming! (in a good way - I nearly cried). For 5minutes work, this is real talent. It's difficult to show so much raw emotion in such a short time that other people (like myself) can relate to and fell so deeply about.
    This is real beauty in words. Love it <3 x


  • strangely-me
    May 20, 2007
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    beautiful


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    January 6, 2007

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    Beautiful and dark

    Magnificent writing. I love this. This is so sad, dark and very very deep. Very emotional piece too. Keep writing, you have real talent.


  • PsychoDreamer
    December 21, 2006

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    I would like to point out first that you mispelled disgust, but other then that this is amazing. It's sad but at the same time shows a lot of love and compassion in a very short poem. That's something I've always considered hard to do and you do it very well. On a different note, I hope the part about your own hatred and suicide notes isnt true. You seem like a fairly awesome individual as well as your girlfriend, and you have a cool name, or maybe im just american? Either way best of luck and I hope you can write something on a happier note soon.


  • Animals Rule123
    November 19, 2006
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    you did great on this poem!You really inspired the title.I would give it a 10 out of 10 if I where a judge for a contest.you should be a writer or author becuase this poem is nice.

  • Red Roan
    October 26, 2006
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    This is an awesome poem, the rhyme scheme was good, never forced. The flow is also beautiful never marred by ackwardness. Keep up the great writing- RAE


  • sheatethewholeworld
    October 20, 2006
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    jesus, you cut the fucking bone that time. very well done. this is exactly how i used to feel with my ex and even now sometimes. i really liked this one, though its sad, because its relateable and real. keep it up! and thanx again for your comments! xoxox


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    October 15, 2006
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    awww, this is touching, the words ring the bells of my heart, this is comforting, cuddling and fabulous! this write is a beautiful and appreciated piece! well done keep writing! you've got the gift!!


    Im holding you, but your not really there
    im hugging you, but your minds else where
    i try to sit still and respect how you feel
    but i love you so much, my heart just cant deal

    i know how this feels!!


  • She burns
    October 10, 2006
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    Awwwwww so beautiful and touching,how much you care and love,from youe heart,This is just so amazing,the beauty of love and the life it gives....


  • Disturbed Sanctuary
    October 7, 2006
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    Beautiful poem. I think it really is something great. Sometimes the greatest poems are written in a small amount of time because they often come from deep in your heart.

  • pozo
    October 7, 2006
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    This was quite a loving, supportive poem despite the sorrow here. Is this for your girlfriend or someone else in her situation? Keep writing, I liked the rhyme which you used
    Thanks for your comment
    All the best
    Pozo


  • Immortal Moonlight
    October 5, 2006
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    I like this.. and really, i can relate.. i dig the rhythem of this poem as well


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 26, 2006
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    This is a beautiful poem. Very well-written.


  • HoneyBlood
    September 25, 2006
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    aww, this is beautiful...and really sad
    Its an awesome poem and full of emotion
    Your words were beautiful and the use of rhyme
    was awesome
    this is a really amazing write!
    I just want you to know though
    that I love you too...immensly...
    and you'll always be in my heart <3
    xXx xXx xx ~ Your Ree ~ xx xXx xXx
    xXx xXx xXx xXx <3 xXx xXx xXx xXx

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