bouquet of roses
gorgeous yellow,pink,red,white
many eyes will bright.
bouquet of roses
pretty pink,yelloq,red,white
delight the sight.
bouquet of roses
wondrous red,yellow,pink,white
velvety feeling.
bouquet of roses
lovely pink,red,yellow,white
cast a swell smell spell
bouquet of roses
perfumed pink,red,yellow,white
delight all noses
bouquet of roses
beauteous white,red,pink,yellow
sad heart will mellow
bouquet of roses
startling white,yellow,red,pink
help change wrong to right.
bouquet of roses
gorgeous pink.red,yelllow,white
hugs,kisses invite.
Author notes
Written April 24th, 2003.the rose.
In a list
A contest entry
- Flower by Bungalow Bill.
350 points, ended November 8, 2006, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bouquets of . . . . by willowprincess.
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interesting use of haiku. and i liked the repetition of the first line. well done, and good luck.
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I enjoyed the picture that each haiku conjured up but the repetiveness of the colors in the middle line was a bit too much. Each haiku standing alone is creative but as an on going series I think that it would be interesting to change that second line by utilizing the different senses ... Just an idea! keep writing. joy
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Roses...ah, the scent of love. lol, joking, never been in love. Hmmmm, I love white roses, this was a very lovely and mellow write. Nice piece, keep writing...
~^~Tiya~^~ *rose
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Caducus.Thanks for your nice comment.I like your attempt,very good one,much.Think you should post it.Bill
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I like your haikus all munificent in description. I have attempted on from a different angle what do you think?
Petals fall like tears,
lacerated by thorns in flight,
Like dry beautiful blood. -
MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM I love Roses of all colors!!!
I could see them and smell them, this poem was visually stunning!!! Loved the imagery!!!! Very nice Billbatd!!!! ~Laura
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TinaBrannon.Thanks for reading and suggestion.I am not offended.I like the capitalized look of my endeavors.Guess you can't teach an old poetizer new tricks.
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I think the usage of capitilizing words within the sentence looks unpolished and for me makes it somewhat of a chore to read.
Bouquet of roses
Gorgeous pink, red, yellow, white
Hugs, kisses invite
That above, *to me* looks more inviting, more refined and the message is still the same.
I am just making suggestions, not meant to offend.
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UMMMM
Could smell and see the roses
Nicely done
Come see me new ones up
Blessings
Susan~~~~
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