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The Ghettos of Kelmitzar

and in the

                         ghettoes of Kelmitzar

there was
          a hole in the wall
          and a door in the sky

and a little patch of winter
               nestled in among the robust maples
the stalwart companions of our cunning





and there’s      a child
who      hasn’t eaten for three days
     who sleeps one day out of every seven years




he missed the hour of the Reckoning
so he’s stuck here

                    a child at a bus stop waiting
                    forever and ever but the bus
has already left


and –
there’s a man at a desk
filling out tax forms from 1993

and nibbling on Ju-Ju-Bees

“they could survive a nuclear winter”
          so he says to the rabbits
          who prance about jubilantly
          feigning love but
          all the while keeping

a close           EYE














out for their runaway souls

they sing
“it is a strange thing when your body takes you hostage”
always in the key of D










                              ALWAYS.













Occasionally
     The hole in the wall gets bigger
     And the child says

“bring forth that fallen angel
bring forth that prince in the dark”
into his kingdom from the
blistering elevator between hells



(the devil is too old to take the stairs)













               they got used to the buzzing
                    YEARS AG o –
Whe n th ey real ized                                             “no one is coming for us down here”

And that
          the drone
          of mechanical goblins
to the distant north

was only the aviators




–dischaos of the highest order–
                –parallax but not medicine–
                                –empty threats and tribal blood rituals–

and      White Noise
          streaming down from the sea beyond her eyes

And The Anthem.








Oh That Anthem –      won’t you Play it Again –

But the aviators they don’t care ‘bout none a’ that
     Post-Modernist Psychobabble

they’re always here for
               the SAME reason
guns

“why do you need them”

“To win the war.”

“what war/// # there aint *@% no war goin on”

“There is war close at hand with the Spies.  They are fortifying their numbers and gaining strength with every second.  The end is nigh unless we repel them.  We must be prepared.  We must stop this scourge.”

“cant you just” …

“What?”

“cant you just
you know
talk about it
come to some kind of understanding?”

“I assure you, Good Citizen Farar, that the Spies are below understanding and compromise.  They are vile, base creatures, and we cannot stand by and watch their reign of terror continue.”

“i dont know about this”

“You are either with us or against us.  There is no middle way.  Either cooperate with our demands or be destroyed.  Now is a time for unity.  Now is a time for togetherness.  Now is not a time for Citizens to be questioning and attacking the motives of their leaders.  You are either with us or against us.”

“what about the…”

“The what?  Speak, Citizen, or hold your peace and aid your defenders, your protectors, in whatever way you can.”

“what about the rumors ///!! i heard a rumor oh i oh i dont know if i should be saying this oh but i heard that – that – that there was a terrible accident”

“An accident.”

“oh yes sir that – that there was some kind of accident and thats how Miriar died oh how i miss her”

“Good Citizen Farar!  You cannot say such things.  Miriar was a traitor.  She was a low and ignominious heretic of the worst order.  Her death was only a part of the natural order.”

“*^ what natural order”

“The natural order in which those who follow shall be saved from the darkness, Citizen.  The natural order which lays to waste those who do not align themselves with the light.  You are in the light now, Citizen.  Do not make the same mistake Miriar did.  Do not turn from the Order of Things.”

“but–”

“You are either with us or against us.  There is no middle way.  Either cooperate with our demands or be destroyed.  Now is a time for unity.  Now is a time for togetherness.  Now is not a time for Citizens to be questioning and attacking the motives of their leaders.  You are either with us or against us.”

“        ”

“You are either with us or against us.  There is no middle way.  Either cooperate with our demands or be destroyed.  Now is a time for unity.  Now is a time for togetherness.  Now is not a time for Citizens to be questioning and attacking the motives of their leaders.  You are either with us or against us.”




        in the ghettoes of kelmitzar




       

  one great civilian soul



is       

         spray painted on every wall

















and the past is locked up in the county jail









until it escapes.                                                                             It |always| escapes.













































                                                                 [it’s coming]











































Author notes

The 2nd in a series.
1) Spies and Aviators
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2194826
2) Ghettoes of Kelmitzar
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2249567
3) 11
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2258098
4) Mechanos Calamitous
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2352077
5) Unseen Angels
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3040166
6) Those Who Seek
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3265846
7) River
http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3595440

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  • Night Hope gold member
    September 25

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    There are a lot of things to digest from within this piece, Connor. I think your metaphorical references were quite clear, and stark in some places. Easily discerned by one who pauses to chew their metaphorical food. This is an interesting and quite the intelligent series you've got going, and I heartily approve of your formatting, as well.


  • earthstar
    July 1, 2007

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    This is not a fast or easy story. Very complex in nature. I understand the reason for your gaps. I feel your story does it quite well. I am now glad for reading assorted stories which helped me with this write. Mixing the subject you did was done well. It takes some work putting together the ideas you did. From your notes, I can see you thought about it before writing it down. I like how you mix it with other forms. Very creative work that you have portrayed for the reader.

  • Raven Judge
    June 24, 2007

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    I had a little bit more trouble with this piece than I did with "Spies adn Aviators" (which I guess isn't saying all that much since I missed so much in "Spies"). So here are the questions that I have so far, and hopefully it will help me better understand what it is that you are trying to accomplish:

    1) What is the significance of the spacing in the piece? Clearly it is being used for dramatic effect, such as in the end of this piece when the reader must scroll down to read "[it's coming]." But considering the rest it is important for me to understand if this format is a part of your comminication, or if you are just laying it out in a way that is pleasing to the eye. (I am speaking here about the spacing inbetween the lines. The spacing that takes place within in the lines is generally understandable.)

    2) Are you telling a complete story here, in the sense that it is excessable without hidden meaning? (Lord of the Rings comes to mind as an example.) Or are you trying to communicate something metaphorical beyond the telling of the tale itself?

    3) Does this piece have a particular historical significance? I mean this in the sense of, might I be better prepared to read it if there were specific historical references with which I was familar?

    That will do for now. Please don't assume that I am suggesting your piece is not engrossing by asking these questions. I simply enjoy a material more when I am able to understand the purpose of the author. It is too frequent that critics today say; "well, I don't understand it, so it must be art." I do not intend to go down that path.

    Thank you in advance for taking the time to help me better understand your work.

    ~Das


    • Connor Blackbird
      June 25, 2007
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      Well, first of all, thank you - very much - for taking the time to ASK these questions - too often I do get those kinds of comments to which you've alluded, given that this is a piece not very much like the poetry you so often see on this site (as for better or worse, I leave that open-ended).

      To your questions -

      1 - I belatedly explain - or, sort of explain - the spacing in the fourth piece, "Mechanos Calamitous", but as it's asking too much for you to go, read it, and understand what is essentially a foreign-language explanation of a foreign language (if you see what I mean), here is what I could tell you about the spacing. The whole series, among many other messages I sneak in, is about unity and disunity, about the barriers that prevent us from being united. The spacing is meant to represent the gaps in understanding between one people and the next - Spy, Aviator, and Human. You could almost think of it thusly - that each of those three speaks in its own language, and each is close enough to the others that you could understand SOME of it, but not all. The gaps represent what falls through the cracks in understanding one another, if you can think of it that way.

      2 - The story COULD, theoretically, stand on its own: it's essentially a story about a forbidden love, forbidden by the society around it. But as that story has been written many times, I would say that there is a lot of metaphor at work in this piece and it is not simply meant to be a work of entertainment. I am not sure what you mean by "accessible without hidden meaning", especially given how metaphorical your example (LOTR) was, but it is meant to be a fairly complete story made richer and considerably more worthwhile by the presence of a larger message in it.

      3 - The only real instances of historical reference that I can think of are in the form of Biblical allusions (so, historical? Not really, no) such as to Gethsemane or to God or the Devil. I alluded to Apollyon in the first piece, Gethsemane in the third, and briefly the story of Atlas in the fifth, but there is no historical significance, really - a few mythological and cultural references, but nothing that would really make a huge difference in whether or not you understand it.

      If you have any other questions, please ask - I feel like these answers don't quite do it, anyway. Thanks for your curiousity.

      -JD.

      • Raven Judge
        June 25, 2007
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        LOTR may have been metaphorical, but understanding the metaphor was not necessary to follow the story.

        These answers have helped.. thank you again for taking the time.


  • Simpatia
    October 14, 2006
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    America... the pity of it all. Lovely piece of work.

    God bless,
    Simpatia


  • jonny rockets
    October 1, 2006
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    Buffalo, nice follow up. I like the length and strictness of the Aviators' dialogue. And it's a good hook at the end

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