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"Come back, Piper.... all is forgiven"

A happy day! A happy day
When Piper charmed the rats away!
(Though tragic, tragic was the morrow,
When Piper called, and children followed!)
Now, though he's lost the town's affection,
Mayor somehow rigged his re-election!
His pettifogging power still waxes
With piffling rules and rising taxes:
Piper: hear Hamelin's supplication:
Come, pipe for Mayor and Corporation!


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  • Doll Faise
    August 8, 2008

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    I loved the orginality that you put into this. It obviously took some effort. Thanks so much for entering. I enjoyed reading this. Good luck!


  • BellaD
    August 2, 2008

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    Now this is an interesting piece. Very creative. I love the rhyme and flow. Thank you for your entry.


  • Dark Otter
    July 9, 2008

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    Very creative!

    It was a joy to read. Political satire is difficult to make work in rhyme. I have to admit your piece succeeded. Thank you for the entry.

    • Vera Rich
      July 9, 2008
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      Well, I think it would be far more difficult to make satire - or any kind of humour - work in verse WITHOUT rhyme!


  • HereComesTheSun
    June 23, 2008

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    is this based on your like past? which is kinda what this contest is about... but good write please let me know if there a story too this about your life it would fit my contest greatly

    • Vera Rich
      June 24, 2008
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      OF COURSE it is based on my past - and, alas, my present! As I said, it is a political allegory. And the country concerned - which for reasons that should be obvious I prefer not to mention here - is one with which I have been deeply invclved for more than 50 years and which, after a brief window of democracy, has alas slipped back into authoritarianism, with all that involves regarding faked elections and personality cult... and now seems to be declining further into full totalitarianism.

  • ecrivain01
    May 20, 2008

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    This is interesting ...

    and if I didn't have so many extremely good entries, it might have done better. As it is, I have a surfeit of riches in that regard.

    Thanks for entering.

  • Judith Chandler
    May 18, 2008
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    Nice write, a sly comment on the nature of politics, not just the situation in Hamelin.

  • ecrivain01
    May 7, 2008
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    Not bad ...

    thanks for entering.


  • daviscth silver member
    February 27, 2008
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    Thanks so much for posting in my contest.
    Cathy


  • daviscth silver member
    February 27, 2008
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    Thank you so much for taking time to post this in my contest! Good luck to you at judging. Cathy


  • JustBeingDevine
    November 20, 2007

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    Nice!

    I love the theme....you penned this piece very well! Very good I enjoyed it! thanks so much for entering. Good luck!

  • Vera Rich
    September 28, 2006
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    To Blackslate and Mythtress - yes... You have seen the point... Hamelin can stand for any country, citym company, university or whatever... and everyone probably will have their own special list of "vermin" for the Piper to take... I certainly have my own...


  • Mythtress
    September 28, 2006
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    Lol...this is rich...simply rich... I love the idea of piping away the CEOs and some of the governmental leaders... While he's at it there are some administrators at a school in... never mind. Grins. Good job. Write on, poet.

  • Vera Rich
    September 27, 2006
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    As Browning's poem begins,

    Hamelin town's in Brunswick,
    By famous Hanover city,
    The River Weser deep and wide
    Washes its walls on the southern side,
    A pleasanter spot you never espied...

    And Shakespeare's (only) son was called HAMNETT...


  • adios muchachos gold member
    September 27, 2006
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    Will you be so kind and place this "e" where it belongs?

    John

  • adios muchachos gold member
    September 27, 2006
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    excessively endearing!

    Hello Vera!
    Where the heck was Hamlin anyway? Wasn't that one of Shakespeare's children's names?

    Very nice parody. I loved that story when I was a kid.

    "I wish I were a kid again,
    Doing what I did again;
    Here I make my bid again,
    To be a kid again!"

    Hope you are well!

    Love,
    John

  • BlankSlate
    September 27, 2006
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    lol... I like this and I love the whole idea! While he's at it he can pipe a song that will take out all the sheisters here and now as well. Grins.

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