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And Slow and Sure the Willows Sleep




And slow and sure the willows sleep;
a breath amiss in songs that weep.
They rise above the creeks and sway;
the gibbous moon slips, there,  between
the stars alight in dreams of sheen;
reflect themselves, still, cold and chaste ~
rejuvenate that flaccid pace
of days so somber in decay.

I walked alone when fields were green,
along a path with arum seam;
white doves were diving, songs entwined,
and strung their chords to wind-swept skies.
And slow and sure the willows sleep;
a breath amiss in songs that weep.

 

 

Ron & Myra 

24.09.2006 

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Thank you Ron for this impromptu endeavour.
Written September 24th, 2006

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  • leo2
    September 20, 2007
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    I don't know how I missed this one but I'm sure glad someone brought it to my attention. I love the serenity these verses offer. It's little wonder that the two of you could join forces and create this polished gemstone of natural beauty. Excellent work my talented friends.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • waydownuponjoy
    September 20, 2007
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    It's always a pleasure

    ...for me to come across a poem, such as this, that has imagery and depth of something sweet. I so enjoyed this and immediately thought of "and miles to go before 'I' sleep ..." so while 'two' seem to be separate we know in our heart that souls are not and so we travel together. Just beautiful and thanks for sharing this gem! joy


  • myrataal silver member
    October 27, 2006
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    I read this once again, and OH! how well we've collaborated on this one ... You inspire me greatly, Ron.

    Love

    Myra


  • Lyndon gold member
    September 25, 2006
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    myrataal, you put this together beautifully. The poem is wonderfully framed by two lines which have accentuated meaning the second time. The vowel sounds give a fine musicality to this poem you have constructed. The long 'ee' sound is dominant and is part of the fine fabric of this nature lyric. I enjoyed repeating your lines aloud. Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    September 24, 2006
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    This poem is a night wind
    In your work you show that rhyme is still relevant and beautiful.
    I often think those that stand so opposed...can't do it.
    Can't do it well at least

    love it

    D

  • myrataal silver member
    September 24, 2006
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    Oh PLEASE Oh Al!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 24, 2006
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    Melodic

    Hmmm. Bet that could be put to music.

  • pozo
    September 24, 2006
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    This poem flowed beautifully. I liked the use of rhyme here, this was an excellent collaberation poem. I found it quite sad, it was an interesting poem since it found sorrow in nature. Keep writing, I liked the natural imagery here, you two make a good writing pair.
    All the best
    Pozo


  • poemtate
    September 24, 2006
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    I like this poem very much.
    Good job!


  • roused
    September 24, 2006
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    nice flow and a pretty weaving of words. good job


  • catz Moderators member
    September 24, 2006
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    I love this wonderful poem, Myra and Ron It's so smooth and natural in its sentiments.

    It reminds me of the huge weeping willow in my grandparents yard when I was growing up in southern Oregon. That tree holds more than a few secrets of mine. I used to climb into it and sit for hours, just thinking, and no one could see me. And one night I even hid in it so my grandparents wouldn't know I was home yet from a dissappointing date.

    Your poem is beautiful

    love and
    Dee


  • Christina Finlayson
    September 24, 2006
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    Simply beautiful in tetrameter and the aabb rhyme pattern which is difficult to achieve while maintaining a natural sound. I prefer the second stanza for some reason and find the repetition most appropriate with two gorgeous lines:
    "And slow and sure the willows sleep;
    a breath amiss in songs that weep."


  • Elora Danon gold member
    September 24, 2006
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    What a lovely flowing piece. It transported me to the very spot. Thank you for sharing.

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