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Eternal Dream Awaits

When you're scratching the walls of the corner

Looking for an escape, just any

When you realize surrendering is not an option

And still your life is seeping away


Whatever you are breathing

Is heavier than air

And by some god you're hoping

You're not really there


Feel your death approaching

There's nothing quick about it

Too bright to see a thing

Please just let this be a dream

Author notes

I wrote this, imagining what it would be like...
I am not depressed, or sad. I'm quite happy, to be honest.
I'm just saying this, to make you aware that this is not personal, and you don't have to save me.

I hope you like the poem, I sure do.
Written September 20th, 2006

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  • Tseng Yu Nung
    April 18, 2007
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    in an odd way, tantalizing

    After the title, I was expecting more admiration for a possible after life. "And by some god you're hoping/ You're not really there" was my favorite part; it reveals a sort of desperation to flee from... everything. After looking at your author's note, you certainly possess an empathetic soul as to create this and be satisfied, lovely write!

  • WinterWolf
    October 14, 2006
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    I like it sweetheart, nice to hear from you again

  • Mj gold member
    October 6, 2006
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    Thank you dear!
    I'm so glad to hear from you again. It truly has been too long, has it not?

    Thank you! I'm glad you like it! dances
    ~Maja


  • morgana raven Greeters member
    October 6, 2006
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    When you're scratching the walls of the corner
    Looking for an escape, just any
    When you realize surrendering is not an option
    And still your life is seeping away


    i love this first stanza i think it is a fantastic start to the poem, this is a great write, and was brilliantly written.
    laurax

  • Mistress Morrigan
    September 24, 2006
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    Good bit of dark poetry

    I like this quite a lot, it's an interesting thought, what it would be like, and everybodies interpretation of the end. I don't need saving either. I think I will read more of your work.

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