Breath panting between full lips,
Wanting sanity's eclipse.
Her deep blue eyes squeezed tightly
And forehead furled slightly;
Her head is thrown back in lust
And I know with one more thrust
She'll be ready to combust.
I pull back and push again
Releasing the heat within;
As I ride her harder still
I see beauty in her thrill.
Her expression makes me wet
And I hope I don't forget
The tune to this fierce duet.
Our fervor becomes so hot
We find pleasures yet unsought.
This heat makes her perspire
Salty drops of desire
And I catch them as they slide
On the Goddess I'm astride
As the waves in her subside.
Her teeth clench her lower lip
And she lets a smile slip
That surges through my charged veins
And stirs up what fire remains;
So I move to her delight
To see her flame reignite
And I cum from just the sight.
Author notes
I'm a 'pleaser'. It's what gets me off. 
Image by: redletterflight at deviantart.com
Written September 24th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Expressions by TheDrip.
330 points, ended October 22, 2006, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this was some real erotica..most here have poem that are more 'porno' than erotic..beautiful..luved it..
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Well thank you darlin'. I'm glad you liked it. You should check out voracious vibrato if you liked this one.
Lady Lilly
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Very hot and erotic! I was just imagining being with my lover
Thank you for sharing this! It's very well done and immensely passionate!
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Nice Lilly, I could see it like I was watch a movie. Sweet
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Well this is definitely erotica, but it seems that it could be read either lesbian or straight. Makes me interested either way. It is sensual and entertaining.
Andy -
I don't usually read erotica, but you've mastered a way that makes it NOT just about sex..it's hard to describe, but your erotic writing is one of a kind in my eyes! Great write!
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This is really good, and you provided the reader with a lot of imagery. The rhyming was done well and I liked the words you used. I also liked the fact that it was sensual. Excellent write and keep it up.
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wow this was an awesome erotica! wet and juicy indeed!
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i found this to be an amazing piece of poetry.. the beginning is amazing and it got me glued to the screen!
but i'l have to say, and although i really really liked the poem, that it sadly got kind of weak in the end.. maybe as mentionned in the previous comment, it was because u were concentrating on the rhyming... but i felt that it could have been much more powerful!!!
anyways.. enough babling
wonderful poem!!!
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interesting...but I feel like I want more. It's important for this poem to rhyme whichh it did...which made it difficult to flesh it out I think. Good luck though!
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I think you could have done so much more with this if you weren't concerned with rhyme! I enjoyed the first stanza very much and I started to see the gal, but the last one just kind of lost me in keeping with meter
The expression of ecstacy is a very specific and personal one, no two people look exactly the same so I would really like to see you show me exactly how unique it is for her 
Thank you for entering and good luck!
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