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The Letter

My Love,


As I sit here with pen and paper in front of me, I find myself wishing it were you instead. How I miss your strong arms around me, and the touch of your tender lips upon my neck. I know that you must do your duty, as are all of our young men. But, I fear for you, and miss you ever so much. I still can see you sitting in your favorite chair, smoking your pipe, and reading your favorite book by the fireplace. How I miss the scent of you. They say the war will end soon, and our boys will be coming home. I hope and pray for that day to come soon. I wonder if our country will ever be the same again after this terrible war between the states. I find myself looking into the eyes of our children, and I can see you there. I know I will always have a piece of you here with me, through them. I am trying to cheer you with my words, but I find I am only telling you how I miss you, and wishing you were here. I hope you don’t think me selfish, but I do wish you were here with me instead of being so far away from me. Please remember that I still look up at the moon and stars every night, and wish you good night like we said we would. Remember I love you, and my heart is always with you.


Your loving Wife


Author notes

As soon as saw this photo is struck me. A wife writing to here husband fighting during the Cival War. The style of pen I quess made me think of a lonely wife waiting for her husband.
Written September 23rd, 2006

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  • madgirlslovesong
    January 4, 2007
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    hm... the letter corresponds well with the picture, i do agree!
    very poetic letter writing..


  • freespirit51
    November 4, 2006
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    Thanks so much Tender wolf I am so glad you enjoyed it.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 4, 2006
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    excellent

    you have the most wonderful way with words.you can just take us along with you any where you choose to go.i could just see her sitting there with tears in her eyes writing her husband.you are really GOOD!!!!


  • freespirit51
    October 5, 2006
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    Thanks so much Pisces for your wonderful words. I am so glad to know my words touched you.


  • Pisces Pieces
    October 5, 2006
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    This brings tears to my eyes! I'm just a sentimental sap! But your words are so perfectly written, so real!! I know far too well that there are probably many wives that feel something like this at this very moment in life! It makes me so sad and angry! War...gosh, how stupid!

    Beautiful write!

  • freespirit51
    October 4, 2006
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    Again I thank you for your you beautiful comment. It just flowed out as a saw the photo. I tried the poem form but it didn't work well for whatt I tried to convey. Since I don't read or write erotica this is what came out...Blame the muse.


  • The FeliX
    October 4, 2006
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    thanx for the comment on my poem... i really like this peice its very heartfelt and im sure touches many people. the picture also fits wonderfully, the empty inkwell adds a note of sadness as we presume that despite letters and wishes to the moon that loved one never returns, what is left when the ink runs dry and the moon is obsured by clouds?
    only fading memories and hope.

    very well written as prose or poetic form.

    Hollow X

  • freespirit51
    September 30, 2006
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    Thanks frog. Glad to know that it touched a part of you and that you enjoyed it. Hope you continue to read my work..

  • freespirit51
    September 30, 2006
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    Thanks Sunshinegirl. I am so glad it touched you. As soon as I saw it it just seemed to be a letter and not a poem.


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 30, 2006
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    A most unique take on the pic! It was an emotional and well written letter! Thanks for sharing and best wishes!
    Frog~


  • StarEyes
    September 29, 2006
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    What an amazing letter! This is fantastic!!!!! I truly enjoyed this wonderful letter! I truly know the feelings of which you have spoken in this wonderful piece! It is really a sad and lonely feeling. You captured that really well! Keep that pen forever flowing!

  • freespirit51
    September 27, 2006
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    Thanks so much for your kind words Lilly. I tried poem form to start but the picture just inspired the letter. So I rewrote it in letter form.


  • Raelin
    September 27, 2006
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    I loved it, so much emotion and it also flowed. Great job. Would love to see it in a form of poetry.

  • freespirit51
    September 24, 2006
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    Thanks so much for your great comment and your critique. I started to write in poem form but it kept inspiring me to write the letter. I guess I was pulled back into time sort of and took the place of the wife.


  • Gentle Chaos Lion
    September 24, 2006
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    {I think you could write this in poetic form, rather than prose, by using some line breaks, clause changes, condensations, and poetic liberties:}
    My Love,
    As I sit here
    with pen and paper
    I find myself wishing
    it were you here safe

    How I miss
    your strong embrace
    the touch
    of your tender lips upon my neck

    You must do your duty I know
    as I weep for all of our young men, but
    must you be gone from me so frightfully

    I fear for you,
    miss you ever so much
    still can see you sitting
    in your favorite chair
    smoking your pipe, and
    reading your favorite book
    handsome by the fireplace
    loving me by your presence

    I miss the scent of you....... {etc.}

    {Touching and heartfelt and would make a strong presentation in poetry form. Enjoyable and intense. Thanks}

  • freespirit51
    September 24, 2006
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    I thank you Frozenterz for your great comment. I have no idea why it came to me as a Cival War wife. I guess today I think of alot of people using IM and Emails.


  • Frozentearz
    September 24, 2006
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    Ahh another unique way of looking at the picture
    a great take on the pen and paper, and yes it brings back memories for me also as the many letters I penned to my husband,
    a beautiful letter through poetry,
    Thanks for sharing
    warm hugz
    Frozentearz


  • freespirit51
    September 23, 2006
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    Thanks Samplette, I am so glad you enjoyed it. I was a very impressive photo.


  • Samplette gold member
    September 23, 2006
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    Very heartwarming...brings back memories. Best wishes in the contest.
    Sam

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