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Who, what, what, when, why?

I have read a lot of poems, so I will make one of my own.


I would like my to rhymin, so because it is all mine.


In a van is where I stay, no girls will come my way.


I pray for me to find, the girl that's on my mind.


I lost her long ago, I hurt her ever so...


I am older and wiser now. You never know what you have till it's gone. I have


learned that the hard way. 10 years lost now. I still dream of her...


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Written September 23rd, 2006

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  • November 14, 2006
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    Maybe if you were'nt such a racist, stopped shaving your head, got rid of the combat boots, stopped goose stepping, and removed the swastika off your forehead, girls might like you!