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Cookie Cutter

A walk through the halls is like swallowing a knife


I don't know why I'm living a lie


my friends don't know how my mind seems to fail


my emotions are covered up by a black veil


I tell them its going to be fine,


and I'm just killing time


the pressure of the world surrounds me


I'm crippling myself by the second


a smoke to ease the tension


a cut to ease the pain


I'll keep living this lie


until I hit the vain


while I'm dealing with my problems


I'll pop a few pills


just two or five more


until I hit a wall


my limit is unlimited


until I've done myself in


why do I go through this?


because I don't fit in


I try my hardest to please people


just to let them down


No one understands me


my life is full of shame


a smoke to ease the tension


a cut to ease the pain


I'll keep abusing the cookie cutter


until I've perfected my life


...never smart enough


...never skinny enough


...never pretty enough


who the fuck do we think we are?


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Written September 23rd, 2006

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  • Virgoan
    December 19, 2006

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    Very contemporary with colloquial and real words. I like the reality biting me as I read this. Good work!

    Lines worth remembering:

    my friends don't know how my mind seems to fail
    my emotions are covered up by a black veil

    Thanks for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing.

    ---"I don't know what to say. Do read my mind."---VIRGOAN


  • Gvn
    September 29, 2006
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    This is good. I relate to it really well and it was an expressive and great write. Good luck in the contest