Your worries took over
Your fear took place
On that lonely October
There was no hope on your face
Your cries could be heard
Your whimpers clear
like a dying bird
alone and in fear
but to me, my love
you rise above it all
you're my snow white dove
flying brave and tall
the past is the past
the present it now
I'll be with you till' the last
smile or row
Author notes
Written September 23rd, 2006
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wooo! yasmin this is reaally good!! i hope you use this in the g & t!!! rlli good well dun hunni!!
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nice yasmin sik b!
al make a new 1 u do azwell plz coz urz r betta n sik
keep it up
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Thankyou
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'your' shoudl be 'you're'
I like the use of rhyme here. Good use of description. Keep writing, this was a great poem, quite dark 
All the best
Pozo
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I can really relate to this.. but today, its kinds turned very bad. Nice of you to share this poem. Its got a nice flow.
Maz
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