I feel like a fly in a vegetable soup
my head is burning my ears ringing, too.
I feel like a spoon is poking at me,
But, the broth is so thick that I can’t see.
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I think I’m gonna hurl!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
"Hello there carrot, how ya been.
Look here, turnip! See the stew that I’m in."
We all stop and stare as miss potatoes floats by.
Then old man onion, he makes us cry.
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I think I might blow chunks!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
Here comes Mrs. Cabbage and she’s all excited.
They’re having a salad and she’s not invited.
Here comes sister scallion she’s a Catholic Nun.
Tell Father Celery I’m sorry but I really got to run.
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I think I’m gonna Ralph!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
I stick out my head and say, “Excuse me miss.
I’m sorry, Ma’am, I did not intend for this.
I took a wrong turn by the garbage can
down came the cover and I’m in the pan!”
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I think I’m getting’ sick!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
The people don’t like me. The cook is ashamed.
The waiter is shaking like he’s going insane.
The girl with the spoon is just shrieking with fear.
If they’d just turn me right side up I’d get the heck out of here!
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I think I’m gonna barf!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
They’re all out to get me with newspapers and Time.
They’re yelling and screaming like they’re losing their minds.
If I was a tomato, cucumber or corn
They’d call me delicious and leave me alone!
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I think I’m gonna puke!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
Who put the fly who put the fly,
(Hurry up and tell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(What you tryin’ to sell me!)
who put the fly who put the fly,
(I'm gonna lose my lunch!)
in my soup, in my soup, in my soup.
Author notes
Ever just feel out of place in everything you do?
Yes, it is a song lyric.
Written September 22nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything and Everything in the Stars by Sam-I-Am.
300 points, ended September 24, 2006, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Your poem is a very unique idea and approach to a subject that is rarely discussed. However, you do no justice to your inventive and original idea. You make vegetable soup mundane with the the words you pair in rhyme and how you discuss yourself as the fly in the soup. Please use a bit more out of the box thinking when breaking your idea down for everyone to experience. Eloquent language is a must, especially for a comical music lyric about vegetable soup.
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Thanks for the comment. Well... this is, believe it or not, a children's song. The language is simple so that simple minds can grasp a complex concept. I suppose I should write the adult version of this, too. Thanks for inspiring me.
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Wow. It was awesome. I liked reading it. The reader is in the point of view of the fly, who's stuck in the soup.
Good job and I hope you keep writing!
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Great job. I laughed more and more the more I read. But's it's very true. We all feel out of place sometime when we have to go places that arent really our enviroment.
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I stick out my head and say, “Excuse me miss.
I’m sorry, Ma’am, I did not intend for this.
I took a wrong turn by the garbage can
down came the cover and I’m in the pan!”
A pleasurable delight indeed, gourmet, your metaphor carries well all the way through and with a unique style and good rhyme thats fresh to read, as abit of a loner in high school I can so relate to this, always unique and stuck in awkward times, anyhoodles thanks with crusty bread- jas
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I liked it
sorry pressed the wrong key before I made comment lol yeah I've felt out of place and your poem depicts that well. Kind of takes you in in a strange but fun way -
I liked it
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Excellent
ROTFL.. this was really really funny! and a bit like song.. very cheeky and clever... i wud love to listen to it as a song sumday... great write.. best of luck in the contest.. i m sure u ll win...keep the pen rolling, lots and lots of love and cheers, hugs and kisses, shuvi
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This is cute and rather clever. Keep it up!
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i have never seen a poem written this way, i love it it seems like a hardcore punk song lol, very good, it could even be a childrens book
. Rewarded 4
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LMAO this is so origional and funny. Reminds me of the movie; "The Fly" Well done!
Love,
Amera
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Good work
I liked this work. We've all felt this way before. Good job and keep writeing. -
This is a priceless lyrical write. Really quite cute to read - a fly in the soup - who wouldn't mind some extra protein in the vegetable soup anyway? LOL
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Ah, it is a song lyric! Cannonsfire hears Groucho, I hear M&M! Funny, with an old MTV feel.
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Lol all you need now is Groucho Marx singing it and you will have the perfect recipe. Loved the humor and the storyline just gave me an image of that cigar smoking lunatic lol. Nice job. Love, C
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Off the hook....
This was just too good and delicious, really, I had a ball checking it out, and the line about..."If I was....they'd leave
me alone." Sent chills up the spine. Great write, a shoo-in for
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very nice and funny lol 
.. well done ..and i think this makes a gr8 song 
me
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hehe this was really funny lol... and written really well, most funny poems don't have that lol but this did.
Seemed a bit of a metaphor without being one lol it's really good
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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This must be a song? Very Funny! I get this too!!!! WoooHoooo!
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This was hilarious, i've been on the end of the consumer of aforementioned soup, but never have I seen into the mind of the poor fly, good rhyme scheme and word usage tied this together humorously and wonderfully. Merry Part and Blessed Be.
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