DROPS
Drops of the water,
Curb me to utter
The feeling to merge
with the drops has urge.
Tip tip on my head,
Then slithering to my hand
Eyes are searching lass
To have salsa in grass
Trembling of external body part
and thunder's effect is in heart
Barking of dog and chirping of birds
Encourages me to go weird
Music is getting me over and
I want to live like this forever.
- Rajendra purohit (RAJ)
Author notes
First of all, I m glad that u have read my poem....
This poem was written by me in juz 15 minutes at the back seat of my class, actually i was bored with the lecture of taxation, so I juz decided to write the poem on drops ( rain )...
The drops over here reflects the rain and I m tempted to take bath in rain and to dance. I have juz started to write poems, so i wud invite ur honest comments on this poem..
thank u very much for listening to me....
take care and yeah ....( damn it!!) hmn....well i juz forgot...
-raj ( keeping an eye on each reader )....I recalled it, MISS ME..
Written September 22nd, 2006
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great way to pass your time,when you have a boring lecture on.
you have used great imagery
keep it up
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Hi raj! I love this poem! It is beautiful!! I don't know why you thought you didn't write good poems, this is the best! I seriously love it to death. Great job. I can't wait to talk to you again!
~ Kerri
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I really like the way you have penned your thoughts in this write. That is what poetry is all about. What we see, feel, and think. Great job!! Keep on writing.
Jeannie -
nice write..
keep it up ..
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wow. good write.
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5 Stars *****
Hey Raj, nice new changes in the poem dost...
I can really see you improving from this point, this poem, this write up. I am not trying to say that your previous poems were not good, but there is always space to Improve.. and you're improving, you have captured nice imagery in this poem. That is, I must say your descriptive powers through words has developed very nicely, and infact you are getting better faster than manyother
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I would suggest you to keep on writing poems, when you write, dont think like, "this is not a good poem" , "no one will like it".. or any such stuff.. just write it, then read it yourself, then re-read.. and then makes changes if required, otherwise, trust me, you'll always find "someone" who will like your poem, whether you like it or not.
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend.. just keep it up..your humble little friend...
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... ... - vic ( who else? )
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THAT WAS AWESOME. LOVED RHYME SCREME. WELL HOPE TO SEE UR WORK MORE Often. CHECK OUT MY POEMS. *THERE NOT AS GOOD A UR'S*
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