You use me and abuse me,
Just like a broken doll,
Tear me into pieces,
And watch me as I fall.
Your words wrap around my throat,
And you watch me gasp for air,
Say whatever you want to me,
Just don’t pretend you care.
You used to say you love me,
Now you treat me like a whore,
Everyday you hurt me inside,
And I won’t let you anymore.
Author notes
Just a very short piece I wrote, about the one man I truely hate.
Written September 22nd, 2006
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Excellent
Very nice write, I really like the rhyming and the flow was really good. I'm glad that you put a stop to the hurt, so much conveyed within such a short piece. Once again great job! bye byes!
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Hunnie, it's so deep and meaningful there is nothing I can fault. Pure raw emotion, I'm glad to see you coming to grips with your past troubles through the use of poetry. Stay strong babe, life will get better. Not all men are like he was, and there's plenty of women out there.
Love you loads hunnie, always have, always will,
Rach x -
I'm so sorry
about what happened some men can be jerks to women. and vice versa. I really loved your piece it reminds me of an ex boyfriend don't wanna go down that road again
*laugh*. Well anyway it was beautifully written and I could tell it was written from the heart Keep Writting!!!!
--Trixie
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