I sit next to you under the light of the moon
You look at me, I catch your glance
Our eyes down cast quickly
I love you
You love me
This is not said, yet we both know
Our glances lock
You look deep into my eyes
You lean in closer
As do I
Closer and closer we get
Our lips almost touch
The ending would be perfect
If I hadn't woken up
Author notes
Written September 22nd, 2006
Mommas Fallen Angel
A contest entry
- OPTIONS COME LOOK SEE WHAT YOU LIKE by lesbian-in-love.
635 points, ended November 20, 2007, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wow Me! by Malkolis.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i Really like what your trying to do here. and it almost works for me. I get a little lost in the middle of the poem and that causes my interest to wain. so unfortunatly you didnt wow me, but i am definitly willing to check your stuff out again in the future.
thanks for entering and best of luck in the future -
Oh dang now that's a bitch. I hate when that happens. Next time please put the option you chose into your authors note. This time though I won't hold it against you since I really liked this poem. Thanks for entering and good luck to you.
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GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
it is so sweat but it is all i felt for you at kelcey's party.. -
Great!
Wow, I groaned at the end.
How many times I've felt this disapointment! I like your varied style here; a bit different from your other works I've seen. Excellent job and keep up the great work!
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thats sweet but depressing. hopefully neither of us will have to endure much more pain in the area of love. great poem though. its good because its short but it holds alot of thought.
Kat
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