Wiltering flowers whisper black secrets, as she lays in her field of misery
The crimson clouds pass by, the same way her life is doing
The wind carries the lies, as they echo loudly in the bare trees
Her cold blood soaks through the soil, leaving it putrid
Her dull eyes will take you to the center of unbearable agony
Where the blade will stain your soul with self mutilation
The air reeks with failure, and she chokes on the filthy stench
She's a poetic tragedy on the road to self destruction
Soft lines of tears flood her frostbitten cheeks
Her chapped lips are stitched with her unsaid words
And her throat is swollen with screams that can't escape
You granted her this horrific nightmare
Invading her dreams like a demonic spirit, you tortured her
Abused and shattered her defenseless heart; endlessly
Beautiful crimson lines trickle from her wrist
And the wind carries the odor of death
Author notes
eh, havent written in a month!!! so bear with me here guys. this isnt good at all. the flow is odd to me as well. comments would be lovely
also:
any suggestions for another title?
Written September 21st, 2006
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hey thanks for the awesome comment =] they always cheer me up. talk to you later. ttyl. lyl
isabel
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Great write really enjoyed it you are so good at righting poems i wish i was as tallented as you cant wait to see some mkore poems from you soon bye bye for now...
BRAVO!!!
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this is beautiful i really love it
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How is this a bad poem? This is an awesome piece. It's so descriptive! I liked it a lot. Awesome way to come back from a writters block. Awesome job!
Me
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Liar. This piece was absolutly wonderful.
I liked how you brought nature to mix in with her pain. Every line made me think. And the pictures behind the words were beautiful.
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This is a really good poem. The background matches it perfectly, because it kinda reminds me of frost. You did a nice job on this. Keep up the great work, Jessica.
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Amazing
wow...this was fantastic! its simply amazing!!!!!!!! It's really sad but you really did do a beautiful job on it..i like it a lot..so keep it up! -
damn isa!
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Thanks so much for the awesome comment. Yeah, it feels somewhat good to be writing again. had some serious writer's block lol. thanks again. =]
isabel
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Wow, stunning piece. The imagery is incredible...it's one of those rare poems where you have mastered not only a clear, vivid description, but the emotion is so tangible...absolutely brilliant. Fantastic write, there's not a single flaw, just superb...
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