Distant Voices
As darkness creeps into my mind,
thoughts seems mired in such blackness.
Holding on is a futile struggle,
between life and the finality of death.
The emotional drain of wanting to die,
seems to be captivating my lost soul.
Resounding drumbeats pierce slowly,
the agony is with life, not with death.
Angelic is losing the war with demonic,
losing my grasp tumbling towards hell.
There is no longer good only evilness,
as my mind only transfixes on the dead.
My mind ensnared by too much sorrow,
my soul wanting to be saved from the pain.
Realizing there is no return from death,
I try to hold on to anything tangible.
My mind struggles to reach out to live,
as I fall to my knees, I reach to the sky.
Angelic voices are heard in the distance,
showing me the way back to God's door.
No longer on the brink of self destruction,
my demons have gone to fight another day.
Be careful for Satan has many disguises,
only a love for God can hold Satan at bay.
Author notes
So don't get tired of doing what is good. don't get discouraged and give up, for we will reap a harvest of at the appropriate time.Galatians 6:9
He will shield you with His wings. He will shelter you with His feathers. His faithful promises are your armor and protection.Psalm 91:4
Option 2.Give us something optimistic, as dark as you like but there must be light at the end of the tunnel.
Written September 21st, 2006
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A beautiful poem, full of lovely metaphors and wishful thinking, but I don't think a struggle between god and satan is what we're looking for with this contest. I understand what you were trying to say regardless, but I apologize for being somewhat anti-christian, but I am. If you wrote it in terms of yourself, or emotions rather than playing the good versus evil, of course good will always win. It is optimistic, but I feel a false one, where are you in all of this? We want self-exploration, you turned yourself into a religious battle. All poems centered around god and satan always turn out the same, in believers cases, god will always prevail in the worst of times, you just have to believe in him. Thanks for entering and good luck
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AN AMAZING POEM
So beautifully written, your words hold so much wisdom and love.
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WONDERFUL COMMENT THANK YOU!!!!!
Thank you for the wonderful comment, Alway glad to hear from you. Take care, Sandy
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sandy, good write my friend. The first part was so atypical for you I had to remind myself that his was a contest poem. I liked your biblical referances. They added the touch that there really is life at the end of the tunnel for believers, so that is a good testomony.Good write, image and visions
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"My mind struggles to reach out to live,
as I fall to my knees, I reach to the sky.
Angelic voices are heard in the distance,
showing me the way back to God's door."
This stanza stands out for me the most. Well done on this beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing. I have felt this agony of struggling to live. Fallen to my knees time and time again... The few times I reached to the "sky", God has definately welcomed me and smiled. I feel this poem is wonderful and true. Great!! Good luck in the contest. 
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incredible sandy...this was an amazing write... I've bookmarked it!.... it definitely gives hope ...and shows what a battle with depression and suicidal tendencies is like (at least that's my view of this write)...i loved this... Smoosh.... Desi
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beautiful
You are so right. I know it gets hard here on earth but our reward is in heaven. -
very strong convictions in this wellwrittien missive
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This is an excellent piece that gives a lot of hope towards the end and a message that although life at times may be a struggle, there is always a new day to come and a hope that things shall be well. I love this and hope you dont mind if a take a copy of it as I am facing an anniversary in a few weeks that is tearing my heart in two.
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beautiful
Very beautiful write Sandy. Very reasuring of God love. Thanks for the pleasure of this read as it has lifted my mood. I have had some things weighing on my mind and your words reminded where to go to find the answers. Just to leave it with him and he will be the guide. Thanks for sharing and making the start of my day a good one. June -
These are such wise words! You mixed sadness and hope like a master. I've tried several times to write about the bible, but I keep failing in it!
You gave me the right example!
I especially love the second and last stanza. This really makes the contrast between dark and light.
Please keep on writing! You did a magnificent job!
Blessed Be
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