A princess saw, upon a log,
a frog who sang to skies above
and so was struck with purest love
that she, sans jest, did kiss the frog.
For this was told, from times long past,
a strange enchantment love would break.
A lady's kiss would prince awake
and evermore their love would last.
A sorcerer, the tale did tell,
with mighty curse and foulest spite
had robbed the prince of beauty bright
and locked him in that gruesome shell.
She'd save him from this awful fate,
the singer and his lovely song.
She'd free, with kisses sweet and long,
the handsome prince who did await.
She kissed him once. It went not well,
the kiss of frog is damp and cold.
Again, with courage brave and bold,
she strove to lift the wizard's spell.
For all the magic she commands
in kiss and passionate caress,
a sad defeat she must confess,
the precious prize escaped her hands.
A frog remains, despite her will.
No prince was he, upon that log,
who sang to charm some lady frog
and, so I'm told, he sings there still.
Envoi:
Despite the clamor of desire
resist the lure of stranger sport.
Princesses with princes should consort
and frogs with other frogs conspire.
A contest entry
- Re-write a Fairytale by EmeraldDreams.
4000 points, ended November 11, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Very interesting. It's not what you expect. It's just, unexpected. It made me smile.
The rhyme scheme was very cool by the way. Best of luck and great write.
Matt -
An interesting twist on the usual faerie tale, for sure!
Thank you for sharing this story! I wish you all the best.
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Zach Estel. -
beautifully crafted poem, simple and resonant.
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A great twist on a classic tale, and a very interesting, and well-wrought rhyming pattern in this wonderful poem. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks
for entering.
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a good twist on the old tale - one of our faves.
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Thank you for this lovely entry into my contest. I simply love the fairytaile you pictured here, unfortuanately this contest is for a form poet and I see no mention of your form in the author notes as I asked in the contest. Nevertheless I had such a good time reading this!
Keep well
Becks
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This fairytale makes a very good fable. And, of course you know the feminist version of that tale....
Delighful write, Maldronuh. I'm always a soft touch for happy endings. -
Hello.
An amusing write, with sensible advice; don't kiss frogs, hahaa. That is some frog though, sounds like he knows he has a good voice, and sings for a laugh, hahaha. Your actual write, I thought was done very well, had a musical feel to it. Your rhythm and rhyme was well done, and it flowed nicely, nice pace, nothing read forced to me at all. I wish you well in the contests you are in.
My regards.
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I got a favorite line in this one . .
It's: "She'd save him from an awful fate" ya. Sounds like for once the woman can be dominate. A change in deposition. Like it and love it. Goodluck in my contest. -
Oh, this is awesome and beautiful. I like it a lot. I love the rhyme scheme you used and you did an excellent job with it. I love the ending, it was hilarious. Great write. Alyssa
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This is just beautifully crafted. It flows well, the imgaery is there. Just a really well done piece all in all. Best of luck in the contest to you.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem- it's deceptive in its simplicity. It has that fable feel to it and it also resembled a Grimm fairytale. I think people need these types of stories today- we're all so lost. Great job!
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