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*True*Story*








No one could believe what happened that day,

Almost losing a precious soul, I say.

Searching for strength and faith within,

 A miracle would do, desperate I been.



When a light of life came seeping through,

Trying to take another loved one to.

It’s not happening at all, I pray,

Lord, you’re not taking our baby today.



As he gasp for air, life and such,

Desperately waiting for his lively touch.

Crying my heart out, like never before,

Reliving this nightmare, forever more.



The pain, the worries, hurt and fears,

Nothing could stop my flowing tears.

“Hang in there baby, please don’t let go”

Screaming, panicking, out of control.



Lord, he belongs to us and you,

And you may have him when his life is through.

But as of right now, he’s not going anywhere,

He’ll remain with his family, it’s only fair.



Things happen for a reason, I see,

But what’s his reason for this to be?

My baby and I don’t deserve such pain,

Aching with fault right down to my veins.



For I’d never again leave my baby out of sight.

It’s my fault that he suffered to fight,

For his life that we all do cherish,

Never would I let his life perish.



Baby when you awake, I’ll be right there,

Holding you firmly, with a stare.

Gripping onto you tightly for ever more,

Because mommy loves you like never before.






 



*TEARS*

*Baby I'm Sorry*

*Mommy Loves You*

*Never Will This Happen Again I Promise You*

*I Love You*

*Feel Better Soon My Love*

*TEARS*













 

Author notes


True Story Here.

I wrote it as if I was the mom cause it seems easier.
But really it's written for my aunty so when she reads it, it's like she wrote it for herself for others to read.


My Anuty's 1 an half year old baby drown'd yesterday in her back yard in the ground pool. He was faced down, if a minute more he stood there, a definate he wouldn't of made it at all. Just a few minutes she left her son alone, as fast as it was, it's as fast as it took for her innocent son to wander around out back and fall into the pool. It took a while to revive him, but with a merical they did. One officer couldn't revive him and he gave up, another guy tried and he came through. My anuty taking in full responsiblity for all actions, she will forever live in guilt for this. All her fault for not paying more of attention to her son. Take it as a lesson learn I say. As of now he's ok, still in the hospital recovering.


-Just a friendly reminder, never ever leave your babies alone even if it's just for a second a minute, it don't matter because anything could happen in just that periods of time. I my self took it as a lesson learned. Please be aware of your babies at all times. Thank you.

Written September 20th, 2006

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  • ronfan6
    August 30

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    moving.

    I deeply enjoyed it. It was wonderful for the revival and it is a well learned lesson. this moved my heart and soul. I do know from experience that leaving a child alone for even two seconds could lead to disaster.


  • Candy6
    July 17, 2007
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    Nice story. Very good free verse poem. I like the way the poem looks.


  • Lionslove silver member
    December 12, 2006

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    Awesome, Tori!!

    ....this is so beautiful you did this. since i never hear from you anymore, i guess this is my chance to go back through your library and comm on your past works. you haven't written anything...or atleast posted it in here since this write in september. i knew you were going through some hard times, and...well...i was deeply concerned ...and i just miss you. i hope you come back. i see you last logged in nov 17...so, that was a relief that your still around.

    i miss you, my dear, sweet friend!!!

    lots of love,





  • angel-lover
    October 24, 2006
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    powerful piece

    Hi Victoria this is very heartbreaking you have done a brilliant job putting this together very well written.
    prayers for little bub xxxx.
    take-care Tori
    from Tracey.


  • exoticbeaches
    October 2, 2006
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    A very endearing write. nice job.

    I pray for the wee one and your aunt. Your opinion is honest and for the most part..Easier said than done. Parents cannot clone themselves when they for one instant must look another direction. Perhaps the doorbell rang. Perhaps the fire alarm went off. Perhaps the phone rang. Perhaps her child was secure in a safe place away from the pool and for that one split milisecond waddled their quick stepping feet over to the pool only to have curiosity bring a frightful family experience.

    I know from experience about taking eyes away from a child. Children under 5 have no sense of right n wrong or staying put. and it only takes a half of 1 second for a child to have an accident, even when in the best of care.

    IF you are not a parent ...be careful how you verbalize your opinion to the parent. Having parental guilt is one thing, being condemned by single family members is worse. Help your aunt understand that she can't be supermom and have eyes all over her body to watch her child. IT truly is not all her fault that this took place.

    Sure it is a lessoned learned for her and for you. But until you yourself experience true motherhood you won't understand and know exactly what your aunt felt or kicks herself in the butt for. Give her as much support as you can without making her continueously feel guilty so that she can heal.I hope all is well with the child.


  • -darkprincess-
    September 22, 2006
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    great

    wow!! really nice writing!! so sad!! i love babies and i cannot see them suffering... i know his mom may feel guilty now, but she just have to put more attention to him, that's all, feel guilty and hate herself is not going to work... anyway, great piece!! i love the feeling you put to this work, it really touched me, i mean, your words express perfectly your feelings, it really shows how sorry she is and how much she loves her son, really really nice piece!! seem like you are a great artist, really loved your way of writing, love the passion you introduced to your words, they have feelings!! so creative of yours doing this as if you were another person, the person who really suffer this, cause you show the feeling really perfect!!! keep writing like this cause it shows you are really creative and with a lot of imagination!!! a real poet!! hope you have time to see my work too!!
    good luck!!!
    kisses!!
    (* pau

  • paul england
    September 22, 2006
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    touching

    that was really touching I am happy to know the little one is ok it could of been worse and a very hard pill to swallow if he didn't make it it is a lesson learned for your aunty but will this lesson be learned by others one wonders


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 21, 2006
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    Very sorry to hear about this, the poor baby must of been so scared, I'm glad though he pulled through.


  • blueyez
    September 20, 2006
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    O wow! How sad vics I'm here if you need to talk!

  • Rudolf
    September 20, 2006
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    heartfelt writing

    I feel for aunt ,A near loss like this can never be forgotten ,nor can one ever forgive one self for a brief moment in time,I'm sure she would do anything to turn back the clock.A truly heartfelt piece of writing ,it,ll bring tears to the hardest of souls,I for one can not imagine the loss and the guilt of this event had outcome bin a little different.rudolf

  • Son of Jim
    September 20, 2006
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    Quite the narrative, one many can associate with, written in a form that makes it poetically easy to accomplish and understand good job.


  • Eyes Of Rain
    September 20, 2006
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    This is so beautiful, and so sad.
    I couldn't help but as I read it though.
    God bless your aunt, and may she heal soon, my prayers are with her, and bless you sweet one for such a loving write from a loving heart. You will all be in my thoughts.
    Sherry


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    September 20, 2006
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    a frightening story...it only takes a second to change lives...I hope the baby is ok and that your Aunt can get over her guilt. Best wishes.
    Rory


  • My Solitude
    September 20, 2006
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    Hmmm, this is quiet a story... I dunno, something just kept me reading, untill the very last word. Perhaps the talent! Thank God the baby is ok. Hope its a lesson learnt for everyone. Even Dads! Nice one.


  • moonmagick
    September 20, 2006
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    This is an incredible write. So beautiful in it's pain and message. I can't imagine what your aunty has gone through, I hope I never do. Blessed be.


  • JamieG
    September 20, 2006
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    Excellent

    Beautifully written - Well I wish you all the very best of luck, I sincerly hope it all works out, however, I do beleive that accidents by their very definition are blameless occurences, tho I agree that vigilance is of paramount importance. Best of luck to all of you. x

  • lilsuicidalgirl
    September 20, 2006
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    oh my god this poem is really sad it mad me cry but i like it alot.

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