A pearl sneers
over vanilla stones.
I need tutoring
for the use of my limbs,
you presume.
Besides, arrogance
drives the men wild,
and the wind…
A tarnished orb
amongst the rocks.
Author notes
Not sure about the title. Any suggestions?
It may seem the first and last couplets don't connect with the middle of the poem, however, they do, but one is metaphorical and another literal.
This poem is vague on prupose.
Written September 20th, 2006
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Nice open ended write here. Arrogance does drive a certain type of man wild, does'nt it? I was really looking forward to sneering balloons, but I guess that, in the end, I had already gotten them, huh?
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The vague essence is the core of the poem. Beautifully penned. I am glad I read it. Take care. Keep writing. Sam
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Thanks. I've edited it slightly because I wasn't happy with the wording, but it still says the same thing. ~
The title "Manager" should be a clue. It's about my manager. She got me stressed today, that's why I wrote this. It's about the fact she's very patronising, knows she's boss and subsiquently makes others feel insignificant. She's also a bit of a flirt which isn't a good trait to have at work. The end is about what goes around come around, and that she's really just the same as us...
So all in all this poem is a bit of a slag off but hey, I feel better now. Thanks for reading. -
hmmmmm...this poem gets me thinking. I know poems are personal, but I think I may understand this better with an explanation in the author's notes. Not that I need an explanation to appreciate it or that you have to put one in, mind you, just that it is a bit TOO vague if you know what I mean.
It is a good technical poem, but because I don't really understand it, I am not sure if I like it. But it is definitely a good technical poem. -
this is great I like the way it was penned. u did a great job don't worry this is my favorite stance...
I need tutoring
for the use of my limbs,
you presume.
again great job.
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