Bleak
the days without moon, earth and stars.
The sun disappeared long ago.
I float alone
Searching for a glimmer of hope:
Another life form;
a place to land.
Author notes
I was challenged to write a poem from choosing one word at random from the page of a novel I was reading. I chose the word bleak.
Written September 19th, 2006
In the book: "Wraiths, Hopes, and Isotopes", which I self published, this was entitled: "Space". DCK
In a list
- Outer Space • next in list
- Contemporary • next in list
- Angst • next in list
- Therapy • next in list
- Wraiths; Hopes, and Isotopes (Book Title) • next in list
A contest entry
- For Poets With 10 Or Less Trophys Only- PIF by Mercury Rising.
550 points, ended September 25, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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The background suits this perfectly I must say, You took this challenge and made an amazing work. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Thank you for your comment and compliment. I do appreciate both.
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This does accurately depict 'bleak,' but even more noticable is the sense of hope. It's not something that bashes you over the head, saying "NOTICE ME!" rather, it's subtle, and is therefore more powerful. Great write
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Thank you for your thoughtful comment; compliment and applause. I do appreciate.
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It's brilliant really. This personifies bleak, as without hope what is there?
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Thank you for your comment; compliment and applause. I do appreciate them. A very good question. However, hope, like courage, and other human attributes comes from within, rather than from without. At least, that's what my life expreience has taught me.
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you've hit 'bleak' right on the head
and with so few words too... bravo!
this deserves ten clappies but i can only give three
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Thank you for your comments; compliments, and applause. I do appreciate them.
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This is certainly a picture of bleakness, and really effective for such a short poem. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.
David
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Creatively refreshing!
This is a great piece, I felt the lightweight feeling overcome my spirit as I can feel the undertones of desperation dragging my spirit further and further from hope and home on Earth.
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Dave
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Sage of the East
Thank you for your most gracious comment on "A Glimmer of...". I do appreciate it.
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Your author's notes are odd...
I was challenged to write a poem from choosing one word at random from the page of a novel I was reading. I chose the word bleak.
All is fair in Love and War
Apart from the weird notes, I quite liked the poem. -
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Thanks
I appreciate your comment and understand why the notes appeared wierd. There is a line I need to eliminate therefrom, and I think I'll do it now.
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wow that was interesting man...was it a departed soul, or a celestial being far from his own planet??
in any case excellent poem that makes you think about the void above us and also the void that sometimes creeps in to our own minds...
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Thank you for yur comment on A Glimmer... ... ... . it is appreciated.
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enjoyed this write. sometimes bleak is not so bad... it can always get worse!
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Thank you, paullallady, for your intriguing comment on: A Glimmer of... . It is appreciated.
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thank you, LadyUnique, for your comment on: A Glimmer of... . It is appreciated. Good luck with your write and finding the right word.
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thank your for your comment on: A Glimmer of... I appreciate your suggestion, and basically agree, the poem reads well either way, however for now I prefer to leave Bleak in.
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good
this is unique, it gives just enough visual information
to allow the reader to think of many things. wondering
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i may try the idea of picking a random word from the dictionary after reading this
bleak...such an empty word yet inspires a write like this
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this is a very interesting write. strangely enough the word which inspired you in the first place is the very one that i think could very well be left out. in this way your vibrant little poem may have more resonance (but i may be wrong.)
what do you think?
Days without moon, earth and stars.
The sun disappeared long ago.
I float alone
Searching for a glimmer of hope:
Another life form;
a place to land.
best wishes on your poetic quests,
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Interesting I enjoyed it. You should add more to it just for the heck of it! teehee
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