Oil
Circular motion
Prod and poke
Dim the lights more
Put on some soft playing music
Lie down on your stomach
So much tension
Need to release some of it
My arms and legs feel like jelly
Turn out all the lights please
Please light a scented candle
Put a warm towel over me
I feel the stress melting away
What you have done is magical
May I take you home with me
A kind of workout
Warmth
Tighten
Squeeze
Very relaxing
Snap, crackle, pop
Let's do this forever
Walk on my back one more time
You can give me a backrub any ole day
Author notes
Just a little something I dreamed up.
Written September 19th, 2006
A contest entry
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What did you think
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I like this... how it shapes and how you didn't have to use characters!
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I miss a good massage
Erotic, sensual, and sometimes sexual. It is foreplay, love and the moment. Candles, scented oil, soothing music. Skin on skin. What more can you want! Thanks
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Oh it's more than awesome!
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Sounds like a great one!
I love the imagery in this.
Well done and thank you for your
entry in my contest! I appreciate it
and wish you the best of luck with it.
Keep up the wonderful work here!
Jeremy0826 -
thank you for the lovely poem and good luck in the contest
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I like back rubs also. I like how this is very sensual in a simplistic kinda way. Great write and good luck in the contest. Thank you for entering
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Questionable
I have to question the format of this poem. Your lines zig zag and it takes away from the poetry. Also there wasn't much there that really made this sound erotic. -
I thank you so very much for the great review!
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Cute I like the twist.
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I DEARLY APPRECIATE YOUR INPUT!
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yeah lol, iloved the structure and form of this, it flowed great really just like a relaxing massage does, no sense in hard stanza's when describing something like this...
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THANK VERY MUCH FOR THE GREAT COMMENT! POETDONTKNOWIT
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Who doesn't love the sensation of a nice massage? Ah, the ever dreamy state....I love the descriptions in this poem. Its so real, I can almost feel the tension in my back leaving.
*~* Mad Hatter Felix
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