You said we should pretend it never happened
yet you've ripped my heart out of me.
You brushed back my hair and looked in my eyes
now you expect me to understand that things must change?
How can I? I am only a child, trapped in a woman's body
Full of angst and fever and woe.
I hesitate when you smile, I don't know what to do
but my heart skips a beat, nonetheless.
I ache for you, yet I don't understand.
I only see the boy inside, under leathered skin.
You singled me out, made me feel special.
I want to hide but you force me to confront myself.
You said we couldn't tell anyone
not a soul, or it would be ruined.
Well it's already ruined for me, I feel dirty
when you pass me in the corridor, without so much as a glance.
I'm terrified as my belly swells
and you're nowhere to be found.
If I told my tale, no one would believe me anyway.
I kept schtum, like you said and look where it's got me.
I hear from whispered voices you are married.
You have a whole world i'm not invited into.
I don't fit in here anymore, my friends are now my foe
they taunt me with their malicious words.
I'm moving away soon, they are taking me to a hidden place
where children are torn from young mothers arms.
A heartbeat, a first breath; my last chance to be saved gone.
I scream from deep inside but no one hears my fear.
I wish I could keep your seed with me but it's hopeless.
I am a child. You are a man. No looking back, no regret.
It will be over soon, but I will be haunted for all eternity
by the emptiness behind my lover's eyes.
Author notes
Written September 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- You love someone, Who is older, and doesn't even think of you like that..... Enlighten me by BurnBrandMemory.
400 points, ended September 22, 2006, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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that is good
this is a really good poem it almost makes me want to cry
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Proof that when we write about ourselves, many times we're writing as well, about the reader. This sort of acceptance these days is hard to come by.
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This is truly a marvelous poem! It tells such a story in so few lines...I loved reading it!
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Amazingly penned!
This is so very painful... A truly vulnerable state of poignant expression and sincere heart break. Written so beautifully; I could feel the emotion rising within your saddened words. Rhyme would have ruined the depth of real emotion here for me. I truly enjoyed the read!!!
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Agh, thanks so much for your comments! it's not my usual style but it's a great competition and i felt really inspired! Thanks a million!
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Lovely. Absolutly Brilliant, words can not describe how moving, and beautiful this piece is. When i read this, i felt like i was reading a piece from Emil Dickenson, or Edgar Allen Poe (not that depressing as his work!!), but it felt like i was getting this from atrue poet. I felt your emotions, i felt everyhting, it was like i basically lived it!!
Good luck!
Chrissy
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Thanks for your lovely words! it's not written from experience as such, i just was inspired by the good contest and started to write and this is what i ended up with! I'm really pleased with it so thanks for your words of support!
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Thank you for your feedback AngelEyes13 but this poem wasn't written with rhyme. It didn't say it had to rhyme in the rules. I just wrote a poem, to fit in to the contest and rules. Sorry if it's disappointed you, I was rather proud of it myself! Can i suggest you perhaps read it again and you'll see it's actually not a rhyming poem and I trust the message i was trying to convey will get across on your second read!
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wow, this was a very powerful piece. It's things like this that make people realize that most men are not to be trusted, and unfortunately - if this is from firsthand experience - you learned the hardest of hard ways. However, a teeny good thing came from it......this poem. I've had a few hellish experiences with guys (not nearly as bad as this of course) but I came through a hell of a lot stronger, and with some kickin songs and poems.
Keep writing, stay strong, keep your head up, and always watch your back. It's the best thing you can do for yourself because you're on your own in this life. If you know in your heart that you can trust your gut and don't need a man to be happy, then you have an advantage over many.
MORSMORDRE!
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The poem was good, however there were some words that did not rymh. Like I said it was a great poem but just work on the word choice a little. Other than that it was great. -
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EXCELLENT
That was excellent, it just flowed and had my attention from the first line. It was very true and a great poem. You captured the feeling of the young pregnant woman on her own. -
Thank you so much for your very kind words and support! always appreciated!
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Thank you for your words! Very sweet!
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Thank you so much for your kind words and support! Much appreciated!
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EXCEPTIONAL!!!!
Very moving, very deep.... this piece makes you feel for the poet, see life through their eyes..... my thoughts are with you, you have a great talent here. -
Very deep and very emotional. You're a brillant poet. Keep up the very good work, I look forward to more of your poems.
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The flow of the write is very impressive and just to the point too. I really appreciate this work. I hope you continue writing because I would love to see what else you have to offer. You paint a rich picture with this pallet of words taking us along enveloping us in the feeling and emotion that pores from each line. very captivating in your choice of words. I liked the overall theme of this poem.
I thought it had a nice flow and feeling to it. Great message in this poem. Thought provoking, Imaginative, and I loved your creative imagery. Your carefully chosen words painted a picture as I read your poetic work of art. I am glad I read it. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways.
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