At the dawn of humanity
Creator imparted in man a bad quality,
For sustenance he always needs motivation
That has given birth of competition.
In every walk of life it is present
Beginning at birth till death.
It is unfortunate to face a situation
When it undermines the main intention.
In writing poetry we express our feeling
The poet and the reader enjoy the dealing.
But the moment trophy comes into the picture
The pleasantry is poised to rupture.
People sometimes behave in syndicate
Failing good writings to appreciate.
They make up their mind in a manner
Which can hardly take care
The best pieces to get the award
Ego, misjudgment make things awkward.
It is better to maintain the same parameter,
Different standard of multiple judges make poets suffer.
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Author notes
Option No.2
I like to change the world by abolishing competition in every field and giving equal opportunity to all to do well.
Written September 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- Rise Today! by Acidanthra.
800 points, ended March 3, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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niiiiice poem. i personally think you have made a good point, and im sure many others agree. good luck in the contest!!!
♥Rachel♥
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Nice write.
Thank you for entering,
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No it was definitely not aimed at you. It was on the basis of ovservation for a long time in general life and about the poetry contest also.
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I hope this wasn't aimed at my inability to judge a contest.
Just kidding! This piece makes a good point about society in general. Once more than one person truly wants the same thing, break out the knives and prepare to be the only one left without a slit throat.
I guess the saddest thing about it all is that it is essentially ingrained into the brain functions of humans to be highly competitive. It is an instinct to be the best that we can be and it is said that more people can't figure out that average and mediocre is okay, that it is acceptable.
Your words speak of a simple poetry contest, however the meaning reaches so much farther and wider.
Great job and good luck in the judging!
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Thank you for acknowledgement and initial comments.
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Yes I totally agree with you. Lot of resources are wasted because we do not think rationally many a time. We just take our life casually and do no good. If we take note of things then many a problems of human society can be solved before it snowball and engulf us. Thank you for applause and nice comments.
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Just wanted to say thanks for entering, I will be commenting ASAP. I am currently at work, so when I get a minute, I will get you a critique! Thanks again for competing
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This was really well thought out and true not just about poetry contests but about our society. So much money and resourses wasted on competition that could be used to better benefit mankind. What about Boxing matches! Can you think of a sadder waiste of time and effort.
Imagine if those big strong men were doing chores for aged or sick people. What a kind world it could be if the Heart were running the show.
Peace and joy, Tara
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