Faster…faster god speed ahead well be moving to fast to be dead as we race the dream and run for cover, beat into submission the nightmare of our insignificant other, these blinding lights rush over our heads they give color and life to the tears we’ve shed, we let the music enter our ears let the sound envelope and drown out our fears…But as time goes on and you travel further all you can hear is the music over the air and all you can see are the streaking lights until you collapse and wake up alone staring into the darkness unable to see or hear anything because you’ve been blind and deaf to everything for so long you’ve forgotten how to live so you sit somewhere between life and death with the ability to breath but you wont take a breath…
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Written September 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- Confusion by Zerstort.
350 points, ended April 8, 2008, 17 entries
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this is really good. i love the way it is kind of a big run on sentance i puts a clear image in my head....the ending line-ish thing " you’ve forgotten how to live so you sit somewhere between life and death with the ability to breath but you wont take a breath… " reminds me of when i was thinkgin about killing myself and wheni was one the edge but i didn't do it... another great write
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that was good. it reminded me of The Used video "Take it away"...lol...do you like senses fail?
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