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Gymnasts (Sonnet #52)

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When beauty, grace and strength are all combined

In vault, uneven bars and floor and beam,

Young girls, petite, yet strong and well defined,

Then dance and jump and swing, each with a dream.


The four-inch beam has filled the best with fear.

They leap and land, then totter and some fall.

The lines around the floor seem oft so near,

That tiny step outside can lose it all.


And yet, I watch the magic that they bring

With ease and supple strength and smiling face.

They leap and spin and fly and then they swing,

There’s nothing that they do that’s commonplace.


Amazed, I watch the tiny gymnasts all,

While praying, as they flip, than none will fall.

Author notes

Gymnasts have always amazed me, particularly those of the female variety. What they do just doesn't seem possible sometimes. I'm in awe!

This poem has been published in the Central California Gymnastics Insititute Yearbook for 2007.

Written September 18th, 2006

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  • willowprincess
    February 3, 2007

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    great! i was a gymnast for 8 years and i now coach it. you have truly captured the spirit of gymnastics. great job.

  • cousino2052
    October 25, 2006
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    this poem was said very well, u got it prefect, even down to the feelings of the gymnasts! Nice Job!

  • ozma
    October 6, 2006
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    Well done, and it didn't go on forever. I like that. You captured the spirit of gymnastics


  • Isaac Bailey
    October 1, 2006
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    excellent poem

    you tailored this picture to a tee with such a powerful swift way


  • wakingdevil
    September 27, 2006
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    Hmm...52 sonnets is quite a lot The poem as always was wonderful with perfectly flawless meter and rhyming.Word choice was good and the thought you put into it was great.Best of luck in the contes.I hope you win

  • elitegymnast10
    September 19, 2006
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    Very nice! I'm a gymnast and I think you did a great job knowing what we do and how we act. You might want to fix this paragraph:

    The three-inch beam has filled the best with fear.
    They leap and land, then tottler and some fall.
    The lines around the floor seem oft so near,
    That tiny step outside can lose it all.

    It's actually a four-inch beam and it's "tottle" not "tottler." What's "oft?"

    Anyway, just some mistakes I picked up. Very nice overall!

    .:~*Lauren*~:.


  • Sharcu silver member
    September 19, 2006
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    52 Sonnets? Wow! That's a lot! I've only written one. I've been trying to think up something for this contest, but I think you have just written a winner here. Awesome job, Grandpa! Good luck in the contest
    --Tim


  • SexyAngel0418
    September 19, 2006
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    WOW... This is an awesome poem!!! You did a great job on this!!! I agreee with you about the impossible... LOL.. I like watching gymnastics AND cheerleading compititions b/c sometimes those (male AND female) cheerleaders do impossible stuff too!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth

    PS Good luck in the contest!!!


  • individuality gold member
    September 19, 2006
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    i was wondering if anyone else was going to bother with this contest i was surprised and still am that we are the only entrants so far. anyway, this is very beautiful. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • Molassis
    September 19, 2006
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    Papa Paul, you have such a way of capturing everything so that we can visualize exactly what you are talking about... THAT is the mark of a true poet... and you have that mark all over ya!

    This is an awesome entry into the contest... and I wish you well in it!!! Excellent entry Papa!!!

    May your day be blessed!!!

    ~Melissa


  • Veronica Leigh
    September 18, 2006
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    EXCELLENT!

    wow. AWESOME!!! I LOVE THIS! You captured everything so perfectly and your words were filled with such beuaitufl grace. I am really really really impressed. Thank you for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck!

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